Reviewed first on endzeitgeist.com, then submitted to Nerdtrek and GMS magazine and posted here, on OBS, etc. Thank you for your review. Not what I hoped for, obviously, but I am going to reach out to Dale to see if there is a chance to clarify certain parts.
Whip of Wounding Words
The whip of wounding words serves as a +1 whip. In addition, the whip can be used to brand victims with wounding words and to unleash the sundering echoes of creation. Branding: as a standard action the wielder can make a single, ranged touch attack with the whip. On a success, the shadowy strands of the whip burn words of unmaking upon the target. Treat this effect as inflict serious wounds (DC 16). The whip of wounding can be used to brand a target three times a day. Echoes of Creation: as a standard action, the wielder can whirl the whip around him. Whispers fly from the shadowy strands, forming harsh echoes that sunder reality. Everyone and everything caught in the 15 feet radius of effect is hit by an effect that combines shatter (DC 16) and sound burst (DC 16). The shatter effect is total and complete, the wielder does not have to choose effects. The echoes of creation break brittle, nonmagical objects, they sunder all solid, nonmagical objects and they damage crystalline creatures in the area of effect. This effect can be used once per day. Construction
Congrats and good luck!
Go team 2013!
I liked this one
FULL SNARK ON Neither does Paizo......
1000 = AWESOME
Your proposal is acceptable........ There are quite a few items that do this I believe
Have a little faith in your skills, Eric Morton of the Clans.
Weird, I suspect that sometimes voters receive the exact same pairing.
Awesome!
And I voted for the IP infringement
So much hatin going on. You guys are fueling a dark god somewhere. This is really mild considering the threads of a few years back.
THIS! RPGSS is something I look forward to each year, weirdly enough I am quite happy about not advancing beyond the top 16.
Once again I have pushed the submit button. Rolls dice, hopes for a natural 20.
If they did traps, maybe they could get Grimtooth as a judge? =7 Nah, you need ME
I am impressed by the high bar that Joel set for the series, good job!
Raven Leather OK review time: I like it, but you need to make up your mind: choose one of the powers and swing for the fences. Don't hedge your bets like this. Overall: very likeable, but focus focus focus
Courtier’s Solitaire OK, review time: I don't like the name. I really like the first paragraph, you give a good description of how the magic works and then in the second paragraph it all goes to hell. In your second paragraph you lose your item's focus and it becomes inbalanced when compared to the first paragraph's powers, you add Sense motive and Perception bonuses, that is where you lose me. Overall: keep a laser focus on your item's theme, don't add powers that it doesn't need.
Second map I have seen, suspecting now that everyone is a map making genius.
Dagger of Dretch Dominion I think I have been guilty of burying the lead again. Mainly because this time I have even misrepresented the lead. Feros said: Dagger of Dretch Dominion:
With full I meant maximum, this still doesn't make the dagger less niche, but should make it more interesting. Thomas, Mark and Feros: thanks for the reviews.
Smurf you too!
Voting for me :> The voting gods are really with me, almost every day I see my item now. Which is only fair because the first 1200 votes I didn't see it at all.
I upvoted my item! All is well :->
water item vs water item. Water item won
PFFF. Don't you know anything? Blood, ooze, and excrement are OBVIOUSLY what this contest is about. ;)Shouting isn't Superstar?They are shouting the name of there item. You lose, Sir. Goodday!
Oh dedication, where are you? In other news: I am downvoting everything with a template error!
Bast eh? Well, you might want to keep an eye on JBE then....... whistles
And here we go.... The usual suspects beat me to it, and they have some very valid points. My take:
Why caster level 6? Because 3rd or even 5th level would be cheaper and cheaper sells (price to buy). It is really heavy, understandably so, but heavy! It has been a while since voting, but I recall seeing this, maybe even voting for it. Your problem is that it is somewhat jokey (is that even a word?) based upon its name. Luckily it doesn't require consumption ;> Very good description, the first three sentences are quite good. And then, BOOM, hello save adventuring item! That kills you in my book, if it violates Sean's list, then your item better be damn good! The last few sentences actually save the item somewhat, giving it some extra things to do. But as I write this, it occurs to me that that is sign of poor design => if you have to give an example it is not clear. Wondrous items never ever should have an example. I actually think that the feet are salvageable, they shouldn't trigger traps but maybe do bull rush or trip attacks as an ork could. The feet combine with an ork-like force?? Making it more dynamic and less save is key here. Anyway, this is way better than last year's item, so good job.
yay, we are a JBE best seller ;>
I'm detecting a bit of bias here. ;) Bias?:
Items that I like: Ciphercoal
and all the ones I submitted :-)
I also like the Ciphercoal, good low level item.
Soulvine Seed Your list making work should be rewarded, but not pulling any punches. Good introduction And licking, yeah, that lost you votes right there. The rest of the paragraph is very confusing, I really don't know what the effect of the seed will be, only that it might give me a drawback. If you have to provide an example in your item description then you are NOT being clear. Also, your effect is very hard to get, why am I paying 9k for this again? I understand what you are trying to do, but it takes far too long to get to the good stuff. My suggestion would be to focus on clearer mechanics and don't bury your lead.
Bracer of Forceful Restraint I upvoted this a lot, its clear, good. Don't know why you aren't building monsters
I liked it for the murderhobo vibe it displayed, it does make it somewhat harder for the GM as it can derail adventures...
Woot! My item made one list, thank you whoever you are, your insight is noted ;>
If you are not seeing this you might be in: Come back January 28 to view this round's entries and cast your vote!
Voting like crazy, can't seem to find my item.......
I am seeing new items too
It's official: official made the cull
WHOOHOO! Only 3 minutes after hearing that the cull has occurred, I saw my item! YAY ME! :D not cool man, not cool ;>
Marathon status unlocked The tags are one of the things that keep me going, downvoting dreams is also weirdly stimulating....
and voting for a Torc, because Paizo reads my post and listens to Joseph
Hey, I just saw a torc that was pretty solid. Don't be hatin'. If you're good, you're good. But voting is hating, it's anger, hatred, suffering, so much suffering...
I hate it when I have to upvote a dream item, see Paizo even reads my posts just to vex me.
Saw something official again Also saw the RPG Superstar 2014 But the real question is: where is my item, I want to vote for it again.
Well the cull might not happen if we keep op the momentum of voting, if however the momentum stops Paizo can trigger a surge by colling. Everyone will need to check if their item is still there.
Had to vote for a bomb, damn you helm |
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