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I recently was thinking about songs for Hell's Rebels because I am planning to play a bard for the AP. So while I was looking through the messageboards I noticed that a few people mentioned "Do You Hear the People Sing" from Les Miserables, so I went through the song and changed a few words so it would fit better in the AP.
It goes as follows,
Do you hear the people sing?
Singing the song of angry citizens?
It is the music of the people
Who will not serve Thrune again!
When the beating of your heart
Echoes the beating of the drums
There is a life about to start
When tomorrow comes.
Will you join in our crusade?
Who will be strong and stand with me?
Instead of tyranny
Wouldn't you rather be free?
Then join in the fight
That will give you the right to be free!
Do you hear the people sing?
Singing the song of angry citizens
It is the music of the people
Who will not serve Thrune again!
When the beating of your heart
Echoes the beating of the drums
There is a life about to start
When tomorrow comes!
Will you give all you can give
So that our banner may advance
Some will fall and some will live
Will you stand up and take your chance?
The blood of the martyrs
Will water the streets of Kintargo!
Do you hear the people sing!
Singing the song of angry citizens?
It is the music of the people
Who will not serve Thrune again!
When the beating of your heart
Echoes the beating of the drums
There is a life about to start
When tomorrow comes!
Aside from the "citizens" being a bit clunky, it's great!
I know others likely don't see it my way, but when I see 'men' like in the original, I don't think of just males, but 'mankind'. It's just the way I interpret it.
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Aside from the "citizens" being a bit clunky, it's great!
I know others likely don't see it my way, but when I see 'men' like in the original, I don't think of just males, but 'mankind'. It's just the way I interpret it.
Oh, I agree that in poetry, PC takes a backseat to meter.
But that consideration only applies when you can't find a solution that maintains both PC and the meter (and you should absolutely look)! Try this:
Do you hear the people sing?
Singing the song of angry folk
It is the music of the people
Throwing off the Thrunie yoke!
Maintains PC, meter, and rhyme, accentuates the positive instead of the negative, and includes two "th" sounds at the beginnings of words (there's a term for this, but it escapes me at the moment).
Yep, that most definitely works! Nice.
Consonance. I still feel like a word other than 'men' there sounds wrong, but then I love Les Mis with the heat of a thousand suns.
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The song definitely fits the theme. Here's my take on the lyrics:
Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!
When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!
Will you join in our crusade?
Who will be strong and stand with me?
No longer be afraid
Of Thrune abuse and tyranny!
Then join in the fight
That will give you the right
To be free!
Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!
When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!
With Kintargo under siege
Will you find the strength inside?
To practice what you preach
And no longer be denied
The right to be free
So come on and fight at my side!
Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!
When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!
The song definitely fits the theme. Here's my take on the lyrics:
Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!Will you join in our crusade?
Who will be strong and stand with me?
No longer be afraid
Of Thrune abuse and tyranny!
Then join in the fight
That will give you the right
To be free!Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!With Kintargo under siege
Will you find the strength inside?
To practice what you preach
And no longer be denied
The right to be free
So come on and fight at my side!Do you see the Raven fly
Singing the song of Silver Men
It is the music of the people
Who will not be slaves again!When the beating of his wings
Echoes the beating of your heart
And the Silver Song he sings
Hails a brand new start!
I like the sound of this version. Thanks everyone for the input.
Here is a good instrumental version of the music.
The lyrics should fit well with this melody.
If someone is gifted with a good voice and wanna sing it, please share =)
https://soundcloud.com/mina-botros-shenouda/do-you-hear-the-people-sing