[bigger]Hangman's Helm
The visual is still unclear to me. I know you're avoiding passive, but feels much more awkward to me than . That's because rope really rarely forms anything, so it's a poor choice for the active voice in the way you've used it. Even seems better to me. You might be able to find a better active verb () that might deal with this better.
If the wearer has killed an opponent while using the Hangman’s Helm, the wearer also gains lifesense 30 FT six rounds a day. These rounds need not be consecutive.
This line bothers me (must not have registered the first time) - he gains this ability permenantly? Kill somebody once, get this always? That seems a bit off to me, somehow - a single-time action granting a permanent effect. (I guess it's no worse than just getting a permanent effect to begin with, it just feels a bit odd. Assuming, of course, that that's what you meant.) Does he need to be wearing the helmet to use it?
Also, hangman's helm shouldn't be capitalized.
...Baton and Bug...
This posts constitutes the views of a (very advanced) CE aligned succubus, and in the language of the Abyss ‘tact’ is the method by which a demonic temptress’ domestic staff affixed her latest trophy to the wall, ‘unfair’ is a common Abyssal abbreviation for ‘funfair’, and ‘diplomacy’ – like a good china tea-service – is something best kept locked away in a cabinet for special occasions.
Having made which quite clear, on to the next Disclaimer…
Fair is foul and foul is fair supposedly . Basically, though, do either of these items have any useful application in a spa?
A lady does not want a troupe of jongleurs trailing her around a spa ogling her wheretofore the baton is almost entirely pointless in this context. The lozenge offers certain interesting possibilities if it is soluble, for spiking other attendee's drinks with; imagine an erinyes lounging in the middle of a brine pool who takes a sip of her cocktail and finds herself suddenly surrounded by four thugs...
Other Comments?
No: succubi would not need a baton for that. Honestly, what were you thinking? We use trained and properly equipped professionals for morris-dancing.
I'm unclear how the physical strength of a jongleur interacts with the capacity to cause harm of the retributive strike aspect of the baton, but then again I'm an Abyssal society hostess, not one of those magical theorists.
The lozenge doesn't appear to have much utility from a succubus' perspective beyond for pranking people, and at 450 gp to make, it's a bit of an expensive prank to employ very often. I would not recommend this product be mass marketed.
Urgathoa's Vaccine
Aura faint necromancy; CL 5th
Slot --; Price 750gp; Weight 1 lb.
Description
Assuming for a moment that it’s more convenient to pay taxes than to circumvent the system, does this item look likely to be a tax-deductible business expense for a succubus art-dealer?
No. Not unless one is dealing with certain daemons, but to be frank they're too putrescent to be worth dealing with. (Cleaning the shop carpets after one has been in is a nightmare, believe me - the dretches never stop whining about it.)
Other Comments?
Honestly, this one is more a toy for a daemon than any self-respecting succubus. There probably are applications that really weird succubi who work with the church of Urgathoa (or the like) could think of for it, but otherwise there's not a lot more to say about it.
Nivi's Randomizing Dinnerplate
Assuming for a moment that it’s more convenient to pay taxes than to circumvent the system, does this item look likely to be a tax-deductible business expense for a succubus art-dealer?
Hmm. Grey cubes of tasteless mush are never going to cut it in polite society as food (even the possible joke about 'square meals' is going to get very old very fast), so any attempt to try and file this as an entertainment cost is a wash out straight away. The diameter's probably insufficient to merit one being claimed as a spare-wheel for a carriage, too (it's round, it's tough, although putting a hole in the middle for an axle would probably be a nuisance), so it can't be easily claimed against transport either. And honestly: paueliel and mithral, with gems? It's in danger of giving a headache to anyone with anything but the most eccentric sense of decorative taste, so it would be too embarrassing to try to claim as a shop-fitting in most books.
Yes, a succubus can pass almost anything off as a tax-deductible business expense, given enough time for creativity, but this item is somewhere towards the 'not often worth the bother' end of the scale.
Other Comments?
Honestly, for five figures, I would have expected half a dozen plates, if they're this gaudy and serve only to make unexciting grey food.
Tactician's Castling Cloak
Aura moderate conjuration; CL 7th
Slot body; Price 9,450 gp; Weight 1 lb. (each)
Description
Brown, coarse, and comfortably well-worn, tactician’s castling cloaks are always created in pairs. Embroidered chess pieces adorn the corners of the bottom hem - a king on one side, a rook on the other; on the matching cloak, the two pieces are transposed.When two people wear the two matched close, and are within 100 feet of each other, either one may activate the cloaks, a standard action causing the two wearers to instantaneously teleport and switch places. This does not cost an action for the partner who did not activate the cloaks. If the second partner opposes the activation, a successful Will save (DC 16) negates the effect, and neither partner is teleported. Gear and held objects come along, but additional creatures cannot be included.
Each pair of cloaks is created with 25 charges; activation of the cloak expends one charge, whether or not the activation was successful.
Construction
Requirements Craft Wondrous Item, dimension door; Cost 4,725 gp
Assuming for a moment that it’s more convenient to pay taxes than to circumvent the system, does this item look likely to be a tax-deductible business expense for a succubus art-dealer?
The word 'coarse' is sadly mutually incompatible, on the vast majority of occasions, with 'succubus art-dealer'.
Other Comments?
These paired items might have actually piqued my interest, had it not been for the unfortunate material that they are constructed from. The concept actually has some merit to it, but alas, the items are unsuitable for being worn - save in the most dire of emergency situations - by succubi of any but quaintly rustic tastes.
Why, Your Stylishness, though coarse fabric is sufficient for plebeian adventurers, I am sure the for one of your own exquisite tastes and creative torture devices, a far more... suitable version may be designed - tailored precisely to your whims and preferences!
May I humbly add that, appropriately trimmed, a pair of these fine cloaks would serve admirably to give the appearance of paying tax-deductible salaries to two professional and highly-paid business managers, rather than one enslaved business manager and one abundantly-muscled Varisian towel boy?
Hangman's Helm (two presentations)
Assuming for a moment that it’s more convenient to pay taxes than to circumvent the system, does this item look likely to be a tax-deductible business expense for a succubus art-dealer?
Not in the least. Conceivably it might have application to an actual artist who specialises in making sculptures that are deeply meaningless out of common everyday objects, but that's about as close as this item is ever likely to get to being involved in art.
Other Comments?
Ick. It's a metal hat, whose principle function involves being so vulgar as to brawl with someone...
A couple of notes - I don't see any mention of a weight-reducing spell, and trust me on this, metal cables are heavy. At only 4lb is this a hat sized for a pixie or something?
Secondly, this item, even if 4lb is the actual weight, is still going to play havoc with almost any hairdo of the wearer. That alone is sufficient to reduce its functionality to near-uselessness.
All in all, this is not one of your better thought-out items.
REWRITE: Bouncing Apple of the Bull’s Eye
Assuming for a moment that it’s more convenient to pay taxes than to circumvent the system, does this item look likely to be a tax-deductible business expense for a succubus art-dealer?
That price-tag is rather tricky to justify for a desk ornament which does not feature gemstones. I'm not saying it's impossible (and desk ornaments are certainly currently deductible in the right jurisdictions); I'm just saying it's a lot of work...
Other Comments?
Wait! It's the dinner plate again, only now it's an 'apple'?
Well this time it makes less sense - which is more chaotic, so obviously all to the 'good' - but apparently it's an apple you can't eat, which is even more fun in the making-the-pit-fiend's-head-hurt department.