That's alot cleaner, you're on the right track I think. I never noticed how wasted the space around the ability scores was before I saw your update. Definitely room to move things around a little :)
Data Lore wrote:
Updated my edit of the official B/W character sheet YET again. With the last update I simplified the ranged and melee attack sections on the front page. I removed the TEML boxes since those are already in the weapon proficiency section just below those attacks. I also put a singular damage box and expanded the trait box.
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