Kevdak |
Thanks for sharing your character.
I thought that the backstory as a whole seemed more fitting for a barbarian than a fighter, but I think that the barbarian class is not included in the Beginners box, right? The fighter class is a solid choice for a new character and player, as it is relatively easy to handle.
Thanks!
The classes that are available in the Beginner's box are cleric, rogue, wizard, and fighter. I decided to take a fighter for specifically that reason.
The backstory is sound IMO, but he´s gotten a bit easy off the hook in the end, I´d say. There might be some penance called for before he gets off the gallows. Even a cleric of Shelyn would be hard-pressed to forgive that easy IMO.
The tournament you describe there has to be a strange affair if they let unarmed folks fight there - is that more like people getting thrown to the lions? This would probably not be something that could take place in a society with lawful and/or good alignment tendencies, more like some sort of bloodsport in an evil society. Furthermore, if there are officially allowed tournaments, he would not be guilty for murder. That part does not sound quite convincing yet. (If it were me, I´d say he killed the hafling woman outside an arena for some reason or other - perhaps a mistake, perhaps he killed her in cold blood.)
I fixed some of the details so that it would make more sense however I couldn't figure out what a Cleric of Shelyn would really want as a penance. I thought a Shelyn worshipper would try to prevent killing as much as possible but I tried to fix that part as well but it still might need some tinkering.
After he left the guild he resumed his tour of taverns and crucibles but this time he fought with greater anger and took pleasure in manhandling his opponents until one day he went too far after a bout at a local tournament. An inexperienced female halfling monk angered by the permanent maiming of her husband at the hands of the dwarf attacked him. Tokas, unfortunately, took no sympathy on her and battered her until she died in front of her children and elderly parents even though he could have ended things much sooner just to feed his addiction to violence not really thinking of the consequences of his actions. When he saw the eyes of her kids as they gazed upon their dead mother he felt instant remorse for his actions and surrendered himself to the authorities who arrested him for murder willing to waste his life in a cell or have his neck chopped off by the executioner's blade. Fate, however, smiled kindly on him and gave him a second chance when a cleric from the local Temple of Shelyn claiming to represent the family of the halfling he killed offering him forgiveness in exchange for him promising to walk on the right path and to do whatever the family and the church asked of him. Tokas reluctantly accepted the deal as half of him was more than willing to end his life for what he had done.
With that backstory, the otherwise unusual choice of religion and alignment for a dwarf become logical.
The stats are quite good, and will make for a powerful, yet not overpowered character. Note: Dwarves are Medium creatures under PF rules, despite being described as short and stocky.
Thanks! It's good to know that at least as a noob I didn't completely f!@@ up in terms of the lore.