nate lange wrote:
That takes serious skill...literally the worst grammatical error I could make at the worst possible time. His family saw the mark as Erastil playing with them, and they refused to acknowledge it. But the way I made Tony was to give him specific reasons to doubt, himself, or Erastil. That doubt I feel is what made him a inquisitor instead of a paladin, things like Erastil killing his family should breed hate, but theres also the fact that their hubris was overwhelming and Erastil was willing to give them another chance. He lost his entire family, his fortune, and his wife to be in five minutes. So with nothing left to latch on to, he turned to Erastil. He thinks himself unworthy and unclean, and wishes to atone for what his blood has done. It's things like that which make him doubt . In my opinion, doubt makes a religious character more intresting as it breeds minor(or major) conflict, and everyone knows conflict makes a character grow.
Alright, updated updated version 2 is a go! background:
Born into riches and nobility, Tony Sinclair had a pretty sheltered life. Anything he could ever want was handed to him on a silver platter, literally. His family loved him, he was engaged to his childhood friend Freya Blackthorn, heir to the Blackthorn noble family of Varisia, they were ment to join both houses in partnership, life was good. The Sinclair family was a noble house which raised through the ranks of power through trade, particularly lumber. They lived in a particularly heavy forested area of Varisia and used the bounty of nature to fund their rise to power. The family had repeatedly come to blows with druids many times in their history and did not have a good relationship with the church of Erastil, in fact Tony's father openly mock them on several occasions, ignoring the fact his son had a mark that suspiciously looked like the dead eyes emblem, and unknowingly gaining the ire of Erastil himself. on the night before his wedding, on his 15th birthday, Tony decided to go on a hunt. He wasn't able to find anything and quickly through in the towel. But on his way back, he ran into a pure white stag trapped under some fallen trees. It was one of the most beautiful creatures he had ever seen, its antlers were large and resembled branches and vines wrapped themselves around the stag's legs, the only thing that ran through Tony's mind was how majestic and beautiful this creature was. he spent hours trying to free the stag and once he did, he watched contently as it ran away, completely in awe of the beast. When he went to bed for the night he dreamed, in his dreams he saw his family fighting against a group of druids, he saw his family using its political power to make Erastil and Gozreh worshipers lives harder, he saw his family defiling a temple of Erastil in spite. He saw all these things and was disgusted, one thing he always noticed though was there was always a pure white stag somewhere in those memories, staring at his family. When Tony woke up, he had thought it was all a dream. Until he saw the same white stag staring at him through his window.
Heart broken at his father's reaction to him trying to save them, he grabbed Freya and ran away from the compound. As soon as they're feet touched the earth outside, the foundation of the compound shattered, bringing the whole thing down upon the entirety of the Sinclair line, killing everyone. Tony tried to explain to Freya what had happened, he tried to convince her that they could run away with each other. She didn't see it the same way, she rebuked Tony, blaming all of this on him. She ran away l, cursing him the whole time as a "stupid tree hugger" Tony was still for the next three days, kept alive by fruit that the stag would bring him. When he finally moved, the stag ushered him to follow. he was then led to sandpoint by the stag and taken in by the local clergy where he has resided for 4 years, serving Erastil so that maybe one day he could atone for his family. looks and personality:
his look Tony is a man(Boy?) who tries to be humble in everything he does, he is a lover of animals and nature. Though he has been known to go a bit gung-ho at times.
sample post: The Swallowtail Festival Those three words set the hearts of the people of sandpoint on fire every time there mentioned. Children wait in baited breath for its day to come and the adults accepted it as a sign that they had survived another year. Many traders and entrepreneurs would enter for a chance to sell there many exotic do-dad's. It was safe to say that people loved the Swallowtail festival. Tony Sinclair was no different. He had only been here in sandpoint for going on three years now, and it never got old. The smiles on people's faces always was the best part.
The bar was filled with the loud banter of peasants getting drunk and having a good time together and Tony enjoyed every minute of it. These people were a true community that stuck with each other; he should know after all. Taking a swig of some fire whisky, Tony sighs in contentment and leans into the table to keep enjoying the atmosphere. "so this is where you always go Tony..." Opening only his left eye, Tony looks and sees a young lass of 16...did he mention that she was glaring at him with a fire as red as her hair in her eyes?
Impossibly, Mirabells glare got even more deep "what do you think your doing in a bar of all places? Drinking too? You've been here for 4 years already, You have to be a role model to the children Tony!" Tony just hummed to himself in response and turns back to his drink, he quickly downs it and turns back to Mirabell "Mira...there is only so much one can accomplish inside of the church, at some point you must leave for a while to mingle with the common folk. If you don't, how will you understand them? How will you help them? I am a child of Erastil, while I was not gifted his power over community, that does not give me the right to ignore those responsibility like they arn't my problem." Tony turns to the rest of the bar and with a flourish of the hands, calls out "and what a beautiful, wonderful community it is!" Roars of approval roll from the crowd as some come over and pat Tony on the back while offering kind words to a kind man. Turning to Mirabell, Tony gives her one more smile before sitting down and ordering some more whisky. Mirabell is silent, then huff and quickly leaves the establishment, burning with embarrassment. The bar-hand then walks over with a large mug of ale "sorry Tony, we be out of the whisky but heres a mug of ale on the house" Tony takes the offered mug in hand and offers his thanks "thank you Gino" The man, Gino, gives a toothless grin and walks off to tend to the other patrons. Now left alone, Tony's Gaze falls on a family of 4, laughing and enjoying there time together, husband and wife lovingly gazing into each other's eyes. Tony's ever present smile melts off his face and is replaced with a soft frown. He turns back and stares deep into his mug, flashes of his family home in ruins shine on the surface of the alcohol. "it's been four years since then..." Tony gets up and leaves the ale there, suddenly he didn't feel like drinking anymore. "days like this make me wonder...am I pleasing you with what I do...?" Walking outside, Tony starts to stroll down the street towards his home, stopping to wave and talk every now and again with the townsfolk. Tony was very well known around sandpoint as a former noble and a righteous and just man. "does me dedicating myself...does that mean anything to you?" Ignoring the gossiping girls infront of the church, Tony walks through its familiar double doors and let's the peaceful feeling of home wash over him. But still his mind wandered back. "if I died right now...would I be worthy enough to join you in the great hunt?" Wordlessy, Tony walks into his room and walks to his mirror. His room was spartan is designe, haveing but a bed and one dresser. Slowly, Tony let's his shirt and robe fall to the floor and stares at his uncovered chest. "does this...mark really mean something?" His eyes trace the birthmark, starting at the bow shape mark that went shoulder to shoulder and ending at the arrow who's point stopped on the middle of his collerbone. "Freya..." Sighing he prepares himself for bed wishing to retire early. Laying back and looking at the ceiling, Tony let sleep claim him. And he dreamt.
Hey nate, if it isn't so much trouble could you look over my submission at some point. I would like to know if my story is fine for your later plans with this game and if I would be better off coming up with a new story. The major thing I am uncertain about is if the way he was brought into the clergy was fine and dandy.
Ok let's try this again, TurtSnacko's submission, Tony Sinclair a inquisitor of Erastil!
Stats:
Tony Sinclair NG Feather and plant domain Inquisitor/1 Int +4 Senses perception +8 ======================================================================== Defense ======================================================================== AC 17 touch 14 flat-footed 13 (+3 dex, +4 armor) hp 10 Fort +3 Ref +4 Will +6 ======================================================================== Offense ======================================================================== Speed 30ft Melee wooden fist (1d4+3) 5/rounds Melee Melee Ranged composite longbow +4 (1d8) Special Attacks judgement/1day ======================================================================== Statistics ======================================================================== Str 14 Dex 19 Con 12 Int 10 Wis 16 Cha 10 Base Atk +0 CMB 2 CMD 16 Feats point blank shot, precise shot, Skills perception +8, spellcraft +4, sense motive +8, swim +6, deplomacy +4, knowledge nature +4, survival +7, handle animal +8, linguistics +1 Traits indomitable faith, birthmark Racial Traits talented Languages common, sylvan Combat Gear trail rations 10 days Other Gear studded leather, composite longbow, 30 arrows, 20 Blunt arrows. ======================================================================== Special Abilities ======================================================================== Weapon and Armor Proficiency
Spells
To learn or cast a spell, an inquisitor must have a Wisdom score equal to at least 10 + the spell level. The Difficulty Class for a saving throw against an inquisitor's spell is 10 + the spell level + the inquisitor's Wisdom modifier. An inquisitor can cast only a certain number of spells of each spell level each day. Her base daily spell allotment is given on Table 2–3. In addition, she receives bonus spells per day if she has a high Wisdom score (see Table 1–3 of the Pathfinder RPG Core Rulebook). An inquisitor's selection of spells is extremely limited. An inquisitor begins play knowing four 0-level spells and two 1st-level spells of the inquisitor's choice. At each new inquisitor level, she gains one or more new spells as indicated on Table 2–4. (Unlike spells per day, the number of spells an inquisitor knows is not affected by her Wisdom score. The numbers on Table 2–4 are fixed.) Upon reaching 5th level, and at every third inquisitor level thereafter (8th, 11th, and so on), an inquisitor can choose to learn a new spell in place of one she already knows. In effect, the inquisitor “loses” the old spell in exchange for the new one. The new spell's level must be the same as that of the spell being exchanged, and it must be at least one level lower than the highest-level inquisitor spell she can cast. The inquisitor may swap out only a single spell at any given level and must choose whether or not to swap the spell at the same time that she gains new spells known for the level. Domain
Each domain grants a number of domain powers, depending on the level of the inquisitor. An inquisitor does not gain the bonus spells listed for each domain, nor does she gain bonus spell slots. The inquisitor uses her level as her effective cleric level when determining the power and effect of her domain powers. If the inquisitor has cleric levels, one of her two domain selections must be the same domain selected as an inquisitor. Levels of cleric and inquisitor stack for the purpose of determining domain powers and abilities, but not for bonus spells. Judgment (Su)
At 1st level, an inquisitor can use this ability once per day. At 4th level and every three levels thereafter, the inquisitor can use this ability one additional time per day. Once activated, this ability lasts until the combat ends, at which point all of the bonuses immediately end. The inquisitor must participate in the combat to gain these bonuses. If she is frightened, panicked, paralyzed, stunned, unconscious, or otherwise prevented from participating in the combat, the ability does not end, but the bonuses do not resume until she can participate in the combat again. When the inquisitor uses this ability, she must select one type of judgment to make. As a swift action, she can change this judgment to another type. If the inquisitor is evil, she receives profane bonuses instead of sacred, as appropriate. Neutral inquisitors must select profane or sacred bonuses. Once made, this choice cannot be changed. Destruction:
Healing:
Justice:
Piercing:
Protection:
Purity:
Resiliency:
Resistance:
Smiting:
Orisons
Stern Gaze (Ex)
spells:
O-level Read Magic, Detect Magic, Light, Sift; 1-level Wrath background:
Born into riches and nobility, Tony Sinclair had a pretty sheltered life. Anything he could ever want was handed to him on a silver platter, literally. His family loved him, he had a beautiful fiancé, life was good. The Sinclair family was a noble house which raised through the ranks of power through trade, particularly lumber. They lived in a particularly heavy forested area of Varisia and used the bounty of nature to fund their rise to power. The family had repeatedly come to blows with druids many times in their history and did not have a good relationship with the church of Erastil, in fact Tony's father openly mock them on several occasions, ignoring the fact his son had a mark that suspiciously looked like the dead eyes emblem. unknowingly gaining the ire of Erastil himself. on the night before his wedding, Tony decided to go on a hunt. He wasn't able to find anything and quickly through in the towel. But on his way back, he ran into a pure white stag trapped under some fallen trees. A 30ft tall behemoth, its antlers were large and resembled branches and vines wrapped themselves around the stag's legs, the only thing that ran through Tony's mind was how majestic and beautiful this creature was. So he spent hours to free the stag and watch contently as it ran away, completely in awe of the beast. He had no idea that he had just saved a Herald of Erastil. When he went to bed, he was taken to the plane of nature, where to his surprise, the stag he saved was in front of him. After some minor panicking, it explained that it was actually the Herald of Erastil himself and that Tony had passed the test. He told him that if Tony could convince his family to officially apologize to Erastil, then Erastil will spare his family of the destruction he is going to bring onto them. When Tony woke up, he had thought it was all a dream. Until he saw the same white stag staring at him through his window. Tony quickly ran to his wedding ceremony, underdressed, Uncleaned, and desperate.
Heart broken at his father's reaction to him trying to save them, he ran away from the compound. As soon as his feet touched the earth outside, the foundation of the compound shattered, bringing the whole thing down upon the entirety of the Sinclair line, killing everyone.
looks and personality:
his look Tony is a man(Boy?) who tries to be humble in everything he does, he is a lover of animals and nature. Though he has been known to go a bit gung-ho at times.
small story: The Swallowtail Festival Those three words set the hearts of the people of sandpoint on fire every time there mentioned. Children wait in baited breath for its day to come and the adults accepted it as a sign that they had survived another year. Many traders and entrepreneurs would enter for a chance to sell there many exotic do-dad's. It was safe to say that people loved the Swallowtail festival. Tony Sinclair was no different. He had only been here in sandpoint for going on three years now, and it never got old. The smiles on people's faces always was the best part.
The bar was filled with the loud banter of peasants getting drunk and having a good time together and Tony enjoyed every minute of it. These people were a true community that stuck with each other; he should know after all. Taking a swig of some fire whisky, Tony sighs in contentment and leans into the table to keep enjoying the atmosphere. "so this is where you always go Tony..." Opening only his left eye, Tony looks and sees a young lass of 16...did he mention that she was glaring at him with a fire as red as her hair in her eyes?
Impossibly, Mirabells glare got even more deep "what do you think your doing in a bar of all places? Drinking too? You have to be a role model to the children Tony!" Tony just hummed to himself in response and turns back to his drink, he quickly downs it and turns back to Mirabell "Mira...there is only so much one can accomplish inside of the church, at some point you must leave your high horse and join the masses. If you don't, how will you understand them? How will you help them? I am a child of Erastil, while I was not gifted his power over community, that does not give me the right to ignore those responsibility like they arn't my problem." Tony turns to the rest of the bar and with a flourish of the hands, calls out "and what a beautiful, wonderful community it is!" Roars of approval roll from the crowd as some come over and pat Tony on the back while offering kind words to a kind man. Turning to Mirabell, Tony gives her one more smile before sitting down and ordering some more whisky. Mirabell is silent, then huffs and quickly leaves the establishment, burning with embarrassment. The bar-hand then walks over with a large mug of ale "sorry Tony, we be out of the whisky but heres a mug of ale on the house" Tony takes the offered mug in hand and offers his thanks "thank you Gino" He loved this town.
John Mac wrote:
Sorry, I didn't mean for it to come off like me being mean, I finished 2 days ago DM Jesse Heinig wrote: Tony_Sinclair, I can't find your character's name. Is it not Tony Sinclair? I thought I put it in the stat spoiler...
Obligatory questions or not, I had a good time answering them :). It showed me some faults with my background that I was quick to fix
Stats:
Tony Sinclair Animal domain Inquisitor of Erastil/1 Int +4 Senses perception +7 ======================================================================== Defense ======================================================================== AC 18 touch 14 flat-footed 14 (+4 dex, +4 armor) hp 10 Fort +3 Ref +4 Will +5 ======================================================================== Offense ======================================================================== Speed 30ft Melee Melee knife +0 Melee Ranged longbow +4 (1d8) Special Attacks judgement/1day ======================================================================== Statistics ======================================================================== Str 10 Dex 18 Con 10 Int 8 Wis 16 Cha 12 Base Atk +0 CMB +0 CMD 14 Feats point blank shot, precise shot, Skills perception +7, spellcraft +4, sense motive +8, swim +4, deplomacy +5, knowledge nature +4, survival +7, handle animal +7, linguistics +0 Traits hard to kill, tough minded Racial Traits talented Languages common Combat Gear trail rations 10 days Other Gear chain armor, dagger, longbow, ======================================================================== Special Abilities ======================================================================== Domain Like a cleric's deity, an inquisitor's deity influences her alignment, what magic she can perform, and her values. Although not as tied to the tenets of the deity as a cleric, an inquisitor must still hold such guidelines in high regard, despite that fact she can go against them if it serves the greater good of the faith. An inquisitor can select one domain from among those belonging to her deity. She can select an alignment domain only if her alignment matches that domain. With the GM's approval, an inquisitor can be devoted to an ideal instead of a deity, selecting one domain to represent her personal inclination and abilities. The restriction on alignment domains still applies. Each domain grants a number of domain powers, depending on the level of the inquisitor. An inquisitor does not gain the bonus spells listed for each domain, nor does she gain bonus spell slots. The inquisitor uses her level as her effective cleric level when determining the power and effect of her domain powers. If the inquisitor has cleric levels, one of her two domain selections must be the same domain selected as an inquisitor. Levels of cleric and inquisitor stack for the purpose of determining domain powers and abilities, but not for bonus spells. Speak with Animals (Sp)
Judgment (Su)
At 1st level, an inquisitor can use this ability once per day. At 4th level and every three levels thereafter, the inquisitor can use this ability one additional time per day. Once activated, this ability lasts until the combat ends, at which point all of the bonuses immediately end. The inquisitor must participate in the combat to gain these bonuses. If she is frightened, panicked, paralyzed, stunned, unconscious, or otherwise prevented from participating in the combat, the ability does not end, but the bonuses do not resume until she can participate in the combat again. When the inquisitor uses this ability, she must select one type of judgment to make. As a swift action, she can change this judgment to another type. If the inquisitor is evil, she receives profane bonuses instead of sacred, as appropriate. Neutral inquisitors must select profane or sacred bonuses. Once made, this choice cannot be changed Monster Lore (Ex)
Stern Gaze (Ex)
spells:
0-level Detect Magic Read magic Mending Create water 1 -level 2/day Wrath Shield of faith background:
Born into riches and nobility, Tony Sinclair had a pretty sheltered life. Anything he could ever want was handed to him on a silver platter, litteraly. His family loved him, he had a beautiful fiancé, life was good. The Sinclair family was a noble house which rised through the ranks of power through trade, particularly lumber. They lived in a particularly heavy forested area of Varisia and used the bounty of nature to fund there rise to power. The family had repeatedly come to blows with druids many times in there history and did not have a good relationship with the church of Erastil, in fact Tony's father openly mock them on several occasions, unknowingly gaining the ire of Erastil himself. on the night before his wedding, Tony decided to go on a hunt. He wasn't able to find anything and quickly through in the towel. But on his way back, he ran into a pure white stag trapped in a bear trap. It's antlers were large and resembled branches and vines wrapped themselves around the stags legs, the only thing that ran through Tony's mind was how majestic and beautiful this creature was. So he freed the stag and watch contently as it ran away, completely in awe of the beast. He had no idea that he had just saved a Herald of Erastil. When he went to bed, he was taken to the plane of nature, where to his surprise, the stag he save was in front of him. After some minor panicking, it explained that it was actually the Herald of Erastil himself and that Tony had passed the test. He told him that if Tony could convince his family to officially apologize to Erastil, then Erastil will spare his family of the destruction he is going to bring onto them. When Tony woke up, he had thought it was all a dream. Until he saw the same white stag staring at him through his window. Tony quickly ran to his wedding ceremony, underdressed, Uncleaned, and desperate.
Heart broken at his fathers reaction to him trying to save them, he ran away from the compound. As soon as his feet touched the earth outside, the foundation of the compound shattered, bringing the whole thing down upon the entirety of the Sinclair line, killing everyone. Tony sat there, in front of his destroyed home, he sat there for three days and three nights, not moving, only able to survive because of the animals which would bring him food. He could have easily blamed Erastil, could have chose to follow his family into death. But he didnt, after quite a bit of soul searching, Tony understood that Erastil was not a bully that killed his family, he understood that his family, while he loved them. We're a proud noble house full of hubris which was the worse offence to the gods there was. He understood the Erastil was a king protecting his subjects from a group that constantly attacked his home and beat his people. Tony understood all of that, he respected that,...he could follow that. Which is why when he saw the white stag once more he prostrated himself and proclamation Erastil his God.
After travaling around Mendev, Tony sensed the waning presence of his lords power eminating from the stolen lands and has heard word of the swordlords plan to explore it. So he sets off to be part of the group ment to go.
looks and personality:
his look Tony is a man who tries to be humble in everything he does, he is a lover of animals and nature. Though he has been known to go a bit gung-ho at times.
questions from DM: "why should the swordlords trust me"
Snacko here This is the actual character I'm trying to submit, stats:
Faasnu Krifiik, Two handed fighter/10 Alignment NG Int +9 Senses perception +12 dark vision 60ft ======================================================================== Defense ======================================================================== AC 23, touch 15, flat-footed 20 (+7 armor, +3 dex,+2 deflection, +1 natural ) hp 95((1d10)) Fort +12, Ref +10, Will +7 ======================================================================== Offense ======================================================================== Speed 20ft Melee +2 greatsword +20/+15 (2d6+16)17-20 Ranged short bow +13/+7(1d6) 60ft Special Attacks Power attack (-3 to hit, +9 damage), vital strike (+1d6) ======================================================================== SQ ======================================================================== Statistics ======================================================================== Str 22, Dex 16, Con 14, Int 9, Wis 14, Cha 10, Base Atk +10; CMB +15; CMD 28 Feats ,improved initiative, weapon focus(greatsword), step up, Toughness, weapon specialization(greatsword), furious focus,vital strike, blind fight, greater weapons focus, Improved critical, Improved blind fight, Skills survival +6, perception +12,knowledge nature +5, handle animal +12, craft carpentry +9 Traits savage, Reactionary Languages read and write: Common, dragonic, comprehend: all as tongue Combat Gear ration(trail/per day)(10) Other Gear +2 greatsword,+2 kikko, shortbow,cracked dusty rose iron stone, Eastern star, goggles of night, serpents band ======================================== Abilities =======÷========================== Shattering Strike (Ex)
Overhand Chop (Ex)
Weapon Training (Ex)
Every four levels thereafter (9th, 13th, and 17th), a fighter becomes further trained in another group of weapons. He gains a +1 bonus on attack and damage rolls when using a weapon from this group. In addition, the bonuses granted by previous weapon groups increase by +1 each. For example, when a fighter reaches 9th level, he receives a +1 bonus on attack and damage rolls with one weapon group and a +2 bonus on attack and damage rolls with the weapon group selected at 5th level. Bonuses granted from overlapping groups do not stack. Take the highest bonus granted for a weapon if it resides in two or more groups. A fighter also adds this bonus to any combat maneuver checks made with weapons from this group. This bonus also applies to the fighter's Combat Maneuver Defense when defending against disarm and sunder attempts made against weapons from this group. Backswing (Ex)
backstory: Faasnu was a child born to two nobles of Mendev, lost to them by a rival house who kidnapped him and tossed him into a river, through the tenacity and the strength of a baby; and no small amount of luck, Faasnu was quickly taken down stream and found by a lone Nagaji clutch mother who took him in and named him Faasnu Krifiik. Raised as a Nagaji tribesman, Faasnu never thought himself as anything but a Nagaji and shuns his human blood, to him his Nagaji conditioning has made him strong, and his human side has done nothing to help him in life. On his 16th nameday his tribe elder told him it was his turn to go on a pilgrimage across the inner sea in search of things of value to bring back to the tribe. He gifted Faasnu the crystal gods of the tribe that would impower him and implanted the gems into each of his forearms and shoulders and sent him on his way and into the world.
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