I just (24. July 2014) downloaded this to run in the upcoming weekend. There still seem to be ALOT of misprints, left outs and stuff not explained properly.
First I will say that English is my second language, and therefore there might be some problem, both her in my text, but also in my understanding of the scenario.
Information/opinion problems:
1. I think there is missing some Knowledge(Lokal) on Nidal.
2. There is no explanation why the demiplane collapses? The former owner died as well and nothing happened, so why now? Why this time?
3. B3 is described as 10 feet wide, but on the map, only depicted as 5 feet wide?
4. The area B3a is not depicted anywhere.
5. As mentioned in another post, if players bypass it and don’t search the hole, the gold earning is reduced by 1/3 of the scenario gold. Shouldn’t we encourage cleaver trap bypassing?
6. B4 describes a room with opposed doors. On the map B4 has one map, but the unmarked room between B4 and B5 has 2 doors opposed. Is there something missing? Or is the first area (marked B4) meant as B3a?
7. On page 12 is mentioned the 2 areas C1a and C2a, but none of them are shown on the map? I figure this is the holes and the “climbing area” but has no real proof of this?
8. On page 13 in the bottom of the first column it says: “Hazards: Creatures adjacent to the pit in this room cover (+4 AC, +2 to Reflex saves) against those below.” Does it lack a “gains”?
9. On page 16 it says in the conclusion: “If the shadow obelisk is carried out of the demiplane, it fades away like smoke, and the cairn is destroyed forever.” How do the players success their primary condition if it is destroyed?
Primary success condition: “If the PCs obtain the shadow obelisk and get out of the Cairn of Shadows alive, the mission is a success, and each PC earns 1 Prestige Point.”
10. It is mentioned on page 7-8 that Andoran wants to join forces with Golbrier, but this is not a part of the faction mission. Why mention it if it doesn’t matter?
Language problems:
11. First line on page 7: ”… though she cagey and sober enough not to reveal where…” is there missing an ”is” between second and third word?
12. Page 7 second column line 19: ”They believed is was the burial mound of…” should the ”is” be ”it”.
Out right missing:
13. Golbrier’s initial attitude towards the pc. (page 7)
14. A few magical items are missing on the chronicle sheet for both tiers. The weapon found after the final confrontation.
15. In B1 the poison is referred to B3, but the poison is described in B2 or rather the top of page 10??
