Here is a custom class I've been working on for a while. It's in a pretty good place I think, but I would love some feedback from other players. Thanks! Magical Girl
"Sorry, the file you have requested does not exist."
File doesn't exist. Make an actual link.
Look below and find "How to format your text", then click on SHOW. If you're quick, you can edit the original post before its too late.
Linkified for you.
Thanks, missed that part.
Your intro is kind of strange. Instead of describing what the class is in relation to other classes, I suggest simply describing what it is. Since you state that not all magic girls are girls, perhaps a name change is in order.
You describe it as a fighter class, similar to the fighter or rogue, yet you give them the base attack bonus of a wizard. Thats a contradiction. Speaking of BAB, in Pathfinder a class's hit points are usually tied directly to it's BAB. 1/2 BAB = d6 HP, 3/4 BAB = d8 HP.
This is a pet peeve of mine, but your chould refer to ability scores as abilitiy scores, instead of refering to them as "stats". Stats would more clearly describe an overall layout of a creature's numeric bonuses and other specific abilities.
So, magic power? What does it do? You don't need to define that specifically, but please mention at least in general terms what the pool is for.
The "Device" class feature seems to be pretty prominant in the class, but it is not mentioned in the introduction at all. It should be introduced there. Also, in the class feature itself, I suggest it begins by describing what the device is used for, instead of just how to make a choice that can't be changed. Start with an overview of the device, so we actually have a frame of reference.
Before I proceed, let me tell you that designing classes is really, flippin' hard. I worked on two classes for months and still haven't finished them because I wasn't satisfied with them. So, I apologize if I sound harsh with my criticism.
1) This looks like a first draft. It's kind of difficult to follow what the class does. The ability descriptions being out of order also does not help with that (abilities are typically ordered by what level you receive them).
2) From what I can tell, it's a 1/2 BAB, non-spellcasting class with talent abilities as the main focus of their class features. I find it really weird that this is a "magic girl" class that's supposed to be a fighter. However, they have a 1/2 BAB and cannot actually cast spells. Even a little bit of spellcasting could help round out the class.
3) In Pathfinder, a class's BAB is directly tied to their Hit Die. A class with a d8 Hit Die should have a 3/4 BAB. Your class has a 1/2 BAB.
4) The device seems like an iconic part of the class and yet it seems to have little impact on it.
5) It's not clear what Device Enhancement actually does. It does not really give the class any ability. You honestly could just say they receive item creation feats at appropriate levels, similar to an arcane bonded item. In fact, it might be better just to make the Device work like an arcane bonded item.
6) Super minor nitpick: You technically can't "enchant" an item. Enchantment is a school of magic involving manipulating the mind and items are (usually) mindless.
7) I'm having trouble following what the blasters do. The description mentions that they can shoot at creatures, but I can't figure out how much damage they do or what action is it to fire them. I had to reread the math of the finishers several times.
8) "Formula" strikes me as an odd name for a "magic girl." Maybe "technique" would be better?
That's the feedback I got for now. Admittedly, I haven't looked over the formulas in detail. I think the overall structure and the core class features should be looked at before going into them.
| 1 person marked this as a favorite. |
I don't mean to be a killjoy....but couldn't you just take the Synthesist Summoner rules and reflavor them to be "Spinny form change to overly cute magical girl x", change tentacles to ribbons, horns to tiaras, serpentine to elastic body or more ribbons?
I mean, its right there...stat upgrades, AC upgrades, size upgrades, extra HP that aren't your own, magical powers, etc.
You could even have the spell powers as 'I call upon my true friends the Ponies of Light!" and have flavored Summonings. Or sorc-like bloodline effects, i.e. Summoner magic, but all spontaneous and from a themed group, like fire spells, wind spells, etc.
==Aelryinth
|
I don't mean to be a killjoy....but couldn't you just take the Synthesist Summoner rules and reflavor them to be "Spinny form change to overly cute magical girl x", change tentacles to ribbons, horns to tiaras, serpentine to elastic body or more ribbons?
I mean, its right there...stat upgrades, AC upgrades, size upgrades, extra HP that aren't your own, magical powers, etc.
You could even have the spell powers as 'I call upon my true friends the Ponies of Light!" and have flavored Summonings. Or sorc-like bloodline effects, i.e. Summoner magic, but all spontaneous and from a themed group, like fire spells, wind spells, etc.
==Aelryinth
Oh my God.
THIS IS BRILLIANT
It's a ways away, but the Vigilante base class from Ultimate Intrigue may very well be a Kamen Rider / Sailor Moon class.
Right now it's supposed to be a 3/4 BAB class, though there's nothing known yet as to whether it's going to have magic or not; given the emphasis of the book, it's very likely that it's either going to be a pure Martial or possibly have Alchemy rather than spellcasting.
The playtest should be starting I believe next month.
I don't mean to be a killjoy....but couldn't you just take the Synthesist Summoner rules and reflavor them to be "Spinny form change to overly cute magical girl x", change tentacles to ribbons, horns to tiaras, serpentine to elastic body or more ribbons?
I was biting my tongue, but I honestly felt this way, too. You could easily accomplish a magic girl or Sailor Moon-ish character with existing classes. So you would need some very interesting, well designed game mechanics to make it worth creating an entire class.
It's kind of how I feel about those trying to homebrew an entire class to create a Naruto ninja and the class in question doesn't really have anything new or interesting. The magus is almost perfect for that sort of thing. Just take the right spells for your jitsu, refluff your arcane pool as chakra, and wield some ninja-ish weapons. Heck, the class's signature spell is basically chidori.
Though, this thought does kind of make me feel like a jerk to say it.