Feedback on a story?

[Azurespark]

I wrote this for a kingmaker campaign, and I was hoping I could get some feedback on it before I give it to the GM. I haven't thought of any names yet, so that will change.

Story:

Born during mid spring as the result of a tryst between a noble human and a half elf. Being an illegitimate child, she was unable to meet her father and so she was raised by her mother alone. As she got older, she started helping out around the house and even with her mothers work (who was a herbalist).

Years later, she was drafted into the regional armed forces. And with her knowledge of plants, she was assigned to help out in treating the injured. It was there that she met someone who would greatly influence her life. [Blank], one of the local physicians, was impressed at her skills at such a young age and decided to teach her more about medicine. But there was only so much he could teach her, so he suggested that once her service was done, that she should go to Lepidstadt University to further study medicine and alchemy.

Following his advice, she did just that and enrolled. One day while reading through some books in Laurelgauge Library, she overheard a couple people talking about the legend of Yggdrasil, whose leaves are said to be capable of curing anything and everything. Curious, she scoured the library in search of even the smallest bit of information, but was unsuccessful in her efforts. Other than hearing about Yggdrasil and the Lepidstadt tradition, which involves dueling upon Fifthstones hill until you receive a small cut on your face (AKA a “Lepidstadt Scar”), school life was rather uneventful.

Upon graduation, she returned to her home town and set up a clinic. Things went well for awhile, but due to her policy where everybody is treated and nobody is turned away (even those without money), she fell into debt. After hearing about the charter to go into the stolen lands, she jumped at the chance in an attempt to get away from loan sharks. And who knows, she may even find or hear something about Yggdrasil.

I haven't decided on all the mechanics yet, but I'm thinking of a bomber alchemist with the internal and mindchemist archetypes. Probably a half elf and get proficiency with a longbow for when I'm not bombing.

[Tragic Missile]

I'm mostly curious on your choice of archetypes in comparison to your story.

Your background screams "I'm a healer, i love to help people, even to the extent of going into personal debt!" But your archetype choices seem to lead towards "I'm only doing alchemy to further my own goals."

From your background I would imagine the character to be much more of a Chirurgeon than anything else.

[Azurespark]

I had considered that, but the chirurgeon archetype seems kind of lacking to me. Mainly that the infused curatives only affect cure spells, so I would need to take infusion anyways to share anything else.

[Pan]

What tragic missle says. Also, are you considering any traits from the players guide?

[Azurespark]

From the kingmaker players guide? I was thinking of taking the bastard trait. Haven't thought what other traits to take, but I like the ones that allow you to use your int instead of the normal stat. And for a drawback, I'm thinking of naive.

[Pan]

Its been awhile but I remember Kingmaker haaving nice traits for story intertwining....(is that a word?) Not sure if I should tell you this or not but funny enough we had a bomber alchemist in our kingmaker game. He did shocking early in the AP....:( Not becasue of the class neccesarily though, so you should be good its just a funny coinicidence.

[Azurespark]

I have heard there are a lot of 5 minute work days early on, so novaing is good.

[Pan]

Unless you are the reciever of said nova then its bad. :)

I like your story but not sure about the healer bit. Why not just replace "healer" with alchemist?

[Azurespark]

Thank you, but I don't think I want to change that part, it's a big part of the concept.

[Tragic Missile]

I think the problem is that being a healer is not currently a big part of the current build concept.

I could understand that build if the character's plan all along was to gain a better understanding of human physiology in order to exploit it purely for personal gain.

Kind of like a social worker who uses their experiences to figure out ways to exploit the poor.

But that's a far cry from a "good" character, and I don't know what your angle is. As a DM, I would tell a player with that combo to either adjust the story to match the build or adjust the build to match the story.