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Lore:
The niakroz are a race of the Kanimeta realm. Powerfull and fast, they are portraited as the orcs of the realm, although they are mostly lawfull resolute creatures fond of tradition.
A common niakroz (Ekro-nian) is a monstrous humanoid that has long firefly like wings, fangs like a wolf, fierce eyes like the eagle, claws on both their feet and hands, and an extended nose cartilage that makes them appear a bit like a rhinoceros.
One of the spirits of the realm (Udun, the being of power) decided to combine the essences of the niakroz race (Qainec, a spirit of resolution) with those of the common human of Kanimeta (Kardian, which are particularly resilient human) to make a new race.
As a result appeared the Niakroz Hybrid (Ekro-Kardian & Ekro-Kardo) which were water down versions of their original races, but they were also really wide spreaded through the realm, outnumbering kardian and all other races.
They inherit both the resolution of the Qainec and the versatility of the human. They lost the claws of the niakroz and the sturdiness of the kardian.
The Niakroz Hybrid are fast, mobile creatures, not bound by tradition like their relatives the niakroz but with a versatile mind as normal humans. They can choose any type of lifestyle and defend it to death if they choose to, no matter if its lawful or chaotic, good or bad.
They lost the fierce wild look of the niakroz and appear more like normal humans with niakroz trades like a smaller extended nose cartilage, smaller fangs, and fierce eyes.
Only the most experienced and powerful Niakroz Hybrids develop wings, which extend off their back and can be hiden inside their skin as though they were never there. Extending wing for a Niakroz Hybrid is always painful, no matter how many times they do it.
Niakroz Hybrids are passionate creatures. Some love art and knowledge, some love war and conquest, some choose to perfect their bodies, some give in to their darkest emotions, some seek to help and purify, some seek to harm and corrupt. Some believe in law or the spirits, and some choose the path of believing there is no truth.
Race:
Niakroz Hybrid Type 1 *Ekro-Kardo* (Version 1)
Racial Traits
• Medium: Niakroz Hybrids are Medium creatures and have no bonuses or penalties due to their size. (0 RP)
• Fast Speed: Niakroz Hybrids have a base speed of 40 feet. (1 RP)
• +2 to One Ability Score: Niakroz Hybrid characters get a +2 bonus to one ability score of their choice at creation to represent their varied nature. (0 RP)
• Low-Light Vision: Niakroz Hybrids can see twice as far as humans in conditions of dim light. (1 RP)
• Qainec Resolution: Niakroz Hybrids gain a +2 bonus on all Will saving throws (1 RP)
• Steady Flight: Niakroz Hybrids can fly a distance of 30 feet with an average maneuverability (6 RP)
• Undeveloped Wings: Niakroz Hybrids gain the “steady flight” racial trait at level 12
(-2 RP)
• Weapon familiarity: Niakroz Hybrids are proficient with falcatas, and treat any weapon with the word “ekro” or “qainec” in its name as a martial weapon (1 RP)
• Languages: Niakroz Hybrids begin play speaking Common and Aganon. Niakroz Hybrids with high Intelligence scores can choose any languages they want (except secret languages, such as Druidic). (2 RP)
• TOTAL: 10 RP
Racial Feats
• Ekronian Resiliance:
o You unconsciously call to the Qainec within and focus your resolution on healing yourself.
o Prerequisites: Wiz 13, Niakroz/Ekro Subtype
o Benefit: Once per day when a Niakroz Hybrid has half its total hit points or fewer, it may heal itself of an amount of damage equal to 1d8 plus it’s total Hit Dice as a move action. This is a supernatural ability.
• Swift Attack:
o Use your particularly high speed as a Niakroz Hybrid to make an extra attack.
o Prerequisites: Dex 13, Niakroz/Ekro Subtype
o Benefit: 3 times a day the Niakroz Hybrid with this feat may make one extra attack with a weapon as if using a speed weapon. The attack uses the Niakroz Hybrid full base attack bonus, plus any modifiers appropriate to the situation. You may do this with any weapon that is not a Two Handed Melee Weapon. The effect of this feat does not stack with haste, but it those stack with flurry of blows, two weapon fighting and similar feats.
• Niakroz Reflexes:
o Use your particularly high speed as a Niakroz Hybrid to dodge attacks.
o Prerequisites: Niakroz/Ekro Subtype
o Benefit: You get a +2 bonus on all Reflex saving throws.