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This is IMO by far your best work, you came back with something a bit more mainstream and useable but still dripping with juicy Boomer goodness. As always, your flavor text is out of this world but this time it's grounded with some great crunch, enough so that those of us who aren't demigods of brain-melting adjectives can appreciate your wordsmithery without our skulls imploding.

My only problem is that while your map is definitely the most detailed, 50 percent of the text on it is barely dark enough to be legible (which is very sad seeing how much work you put into it.) While this might be a scanner issue, it really stands out based on the excellence of the rest of your submission. Also, with such attention to the little details on the map, the absence of trap locations is a puzzling omission.

But all in all, you definitely got the message - big time props.

Christine, you've been my favorite since you blew me away with "Theocracy of Carnamach." Your English has dramatically improved over the course of this contest and you've had big idea after big idea.

I have to disagree with the "railroad encounter" critiques, I think you went with a very cinematic approach and it paid off big time. The events prior to and after this encounter are outlined in a serviceable manner, but I wanted some information on the Brazen Juggernaut (although I loved the tribal flavor text.) Outlining the encounter makes this very easy to run and you give us rules for all the funky stuff that can/does happen. The image of a fiendish flaming orc catapulting over the PCs with raiders jumping onto their sled all while rocketing down a lava tube is good, having him crash his sled onto theirs during a volcanic eruption is genius.

You defiantly have my vote this round and it is going to take a major coup for you not to get my vote for the win.
I can't wait to see what you come up within round 6.