Miss Jacki
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I'm a girl's girl. I fall in love with love themed back stories, and especially with Valentines day coming up, it's a perfect time for them. I see what you're trying to do here, and I give you props for trying to do it. However, it fails for me in a few ways.
I understand that she's married through duty, plain as can be, and can likely only find love in her dreams. I get how Thom as her eidolon becomes her love, but I don't understand how he becomes this murderous monster. You say he kills for love, but how does his killing show his love? Does he gain strength by doing so, coming closer to being 'real' or manifesting during waking hours as it hints in the Motivations/Goals? I see that you leave it open for a triangle, but it sounds like this is resulting in multiple, ongoing deaths. Does Rosiline fall in love with every male that she meets and only at night does Thom get his chance at revenge and kills them all? Does she control Thom and try and kill every female he might have eyes for? I just don't understand why there the blood-lust comes from otherwise.
Even with a villain, it's nice to be able to swoon when you put yourself in their shoes if they have a back story with lovers in it. Too, with a villain I either have to HATE to LOVE them or LOVE to Hate them. Unfortunately with what we've been given and as many questions as it leaves me, I just don't love Rosiline at all.
Rosiline won't be getting my vote this round.
