| Ann Shorter |
Pedro, welcome to Round 4!
Your map looks great. Normally I don't expect this level of detail in a map sketch from a designer, but the computer tools available nowadays allow you to create stuff like this. The only developer problem (and this is a minor problem) with these kind of map turnovers is that if the developer need to change or note something on the map, it's a lot harder to do so when there is so much detail--I'd need to use Photoshop to move stuff on this map, whereas with a line map I could use whiteout and a pen to redraw something on a different place on the map. But Rob likes it, so I'm not really complaining--just remember that the map you send your developer may need to be changed, and doesn't have to look like a professional map in a book.
The use of the approaching army as the timer for the encounter is an interesting mechanic and puts some necessary pressure on the PCs to get things done in a hurry.
There are a few slight terminology errors popping up, but I assume part of that is because English isn't your primary language, and part is because you haven't been given an official document from Paizo saying "this is how you write damage information," for example. That's all stuff I'm sure you can learn--I've seen you improve since your wondrous item submission, so you're obviously good at listening to feedback. Flicking Soccer
You have a LOT going on in this encounter, with the approaching army, the cultists with the reversing ritual, the drawbridge, the oozes, and the enemy leader working to counter any actions the PCs take. I think this would be a difficult encounter to run, requiring some extra planning by the GM, but if pulled off I'm sure it would be a very memorable encounter. I agree with Clark and Wolf that you're coming close to the other creatures outshining the R3 monster, but this encounter is happening because of those oozes, so that gives them a little more weight regarding their role in this thing.
I don't think this is the best encounter this round, but it is a...
Love your ideas. Can you share more?