Let me see, the shopkeeper told me when I called ahead that things would start at 10:00, and sure enough someone arrived to play at noon. Too bad they came to play the WoW CCG. I did come across three Basic D&D Gazetteers to add to my collection, at half what I would've paid on eBay. And I bought three Dungeon Crawl Classics. I guess it was a success for the store on that account. When I left at 2:00 (with the swag) there was no hope of the D&D adventure being played, but at least I didn't get suckered into playing the Starcraft boardgame. Fantasy Flight Games be darned!
Jebadiah Utecht wrote: I've gotta second Mona on Jack London's Martin Eden. (I don't think I've thought of that book in ten years.) It's got a section three chapters in length that details Eden's 100 hour work weeks and perfectly captures exactly how soul crushing a job can be. Alright then, I'm taking a copy of that home from work (at a library). Thanks to Erik and Jebadiah for bringing it to my attention
The PUBLISHER of Paizo shares his favorite books with us and we take it in stride. We must be spolied. Custom of the Country by Edith Wharton is worthwhile. Undine Spragg is an unforgettable character. Nothing can top Ulysses,even if just for the snot and Gorgonzola sandwich. And the brothel scene might make you think you're reading Poppy Z. Brite. Hm. . . that's not such a good thing, is it? But Flannery O'Connor is my favorite. Her descriptions of characters are perfect, and her black humor is delicious.
My thanks for any commentary, especially suggestions for improvement.
Spoiler: What is the object that vanished and why is it important to retrieve it? A clear blue crystal, of the sort Azurestone is named for, was used in dim antiquity to capture the first snowflake of the Last Winter before it touched the ground. Since that time it has been enshrined below Azurestone and its magic has kept the harbinger of the Last Winter, the Red Raven, frozen in time.
What are two of the obstacles the PCs must overcome while chasing down the culprit? The culprits kidnap a group of loggers and, before carrying off the hostages, order the loggers to lure the PCs into an ambush. If the PCs answer the request for help, they’re attacked by orcs and giant buzzards who drop hollowed buzzard eggs packed with choking mustard powder. The PCs will have to deal with the attackers and find the hostages, costing them scarce time. The culprits, a band of half-ogres, abandon the hostages in a cave that houses a Scabrous Broodmother, an undead thing of blood that tears its own flesh to spawn bloodsucking little Scablings.
Who took the object and why? Agents of the centaur warlord Toxoph raided the Red Raven shrine openly, killing several guardsmen. Toxoph plans to use the crystal’s winter magic against his rivals, tribes of ogres and athachs that war for dominance of the Fog Peaks. His first plan is to imprison the head brute of the athachs, called Ur-Athach. What will the final showdown with the culprit look like? Toxoph has pretensions of empire and loves to force his barbarian orc subjects to celebrate his magnificence. He is particularly fond of the songs of his court bard, the ogre Bellower. The PCs have a chance to catch him unawares if they can strike amid the fanfare and pageantry of one of Toxoph’s galas, held at the frozen feet of Ur-Athach. It seems the victory is not hard won until the Red Raven comes to claim the crystal. What new monster do you plan to include in this adventure? In addition to the Scabrous Broodmother, there is the Red Raven, which is now a mockery of its once noble self. It has a naked serpent-like neck and a venomous beak. Its shadow is nightmare itself, causing those it falls upon to see their worst fears in the flesh. As the illusions appear only to the afflicted, their friends are powerless to help.
I'll share my query as soon as I get my rejection letter. I'd love to get feedback from all you bright folks about why it didn't win. Until then, here are some things I know I should have done differently: 1) I didn't know there were ogres in the Pathfinder AP (though I remember reading that several weeks ago) and I included them with out knowing how that might clash with their plans for them. 2) I stuck in half-ogres at the last minute without thinking about it and then panicked that they were closed content . . . until I found them in Tome of Horrors. 3) I didn't have Tome of Horrors when I was working on the query. 4) My query looks like it's by someone who's never written a module. I'm thinking now that it really should look more like it was reduced from a full outline that I know would fill 22,000 words. 5) And because I didn't have a full outline, my query was fatally short: 575 words or so altogether. I thought the questionas were answered adequately and I didn't know what more to add. I didn't want to put in a bunch of stuff they didn't ask for. 6) I didn't do a draft until the morning it was due, so I didn't have time to deal with the short word count. All week long I told myself, Do an early draft! I didn't listen. What kind of worries are giving you nightsweats? |