First-Time PC Race Creation (Looking for Critiques)


Homebrew and House Rules


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Quick backstory: a while ago I made this virtual RPG for my girlfriend, and she really liked it, and I was pretty proud of it. But it felt like making a virtual RPG sort of limited the world I was trying to create, so I decided to convert it to a medium with a human element: tabletop RPG.

So I'm trying to make a homebrew that happens to throw out most of the canon races. In fact, the only race that's completely identical to its canon counterpart is humans. There's a race known as elves, but they're not exactly core elves, at least in terms of stats and traits.

The six core races I have for this project are humans, Fae, satyrs, nereids, elves, and changelings (half-Fae), the latter two of which are split into subraces. But I have no idea if they're all balanced with each other, much less with the core humans. I tried using a racial point system, but I'm unsure of the values of certain traits, and I've sort of made up a few things as I went along. I'm entirely spitballing here.

This is meant to be heavily based on roleplaying as opposed to combat, though of course, there are important encounters as well. Also, lots of flavor.

Any feedback is appreciated. Don't hold back.

Setting Flavor Summary: This is a world where adventurers are very important. Among the common folk, adventurers are treated as saviors, though those of the upper-class tend to look down upon them as reckless outlaws with dirty jobs. Adventuring is, in fact, considered a formal occupation with high demand. Many guilds roam the land, acting as adventurer companies of sorts, with all of the bureaucracy to match, though parties and sometimes individual adventurers take on freelance work as well and get to travel the world in turn. The largest known guild is known as the Sunrise Rebellion, which founded most of the mainland's now-wealthiest cities.
Magic is considered something inherent in this universe that only some are born with the power to wield. That said, some don't unlock their magical abilities until later in life. All races are capable of bearing magical children, but the most likely to bear such power are the Fae and Nereids (who happen to hate each other). There is also such a thing called "attunement", or attuning to one's environment so that one may perform feats that seem like magic. This is sometimes derogatorily called "fake magic". Elves have an affinity for it, though anyone can learn it with practice. Bards, as written in this setting, are infamous for it, and some other classes' magic will also be referred to as attunement for optional balancing purposes. Wizards, clerics and the like, however, require true magic.

Changelings:
Changelings

Flavor Summary: Changelings are the offspring of humans and Fae, often via Fae trickery. They grow up with their human parents and are either ostracized or worshipped depending on the attitude of their society. They look most human, but with unusual eye colors and plant-like traits from their Fae parents. Each changeling has one plant-like trait, which separates the changelings into three subraces: flower-bearing, vine-bearing, and thorn-bearing.

Traits:

Flower-Bearing Changeling
+2 Str, Dex, Int, Wis, OR Cha; -1 Con While her human lineage allows her to be generally versatile, a flower-bearing changeling is rather fragile and has bad luck with constitution.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 30’
Distinct Aura: Changelings have a strange and distinct presence about them that makes them very recognizable and noticeable. Changelings receive -4 to disguise checks and -2 to stealth checks.
Dual Origin: Changelings are considered both human and Fae for battle purposes. They have access to any human- or Fae-exclusive feats, as well as their own changeling-exclusive feats.
Hybrid: As a hybrid, changelings have better immunity and have +2 save against sickness and poison.
Flower Power: Flower-bearing changelings have a natural magical talent and are able to use Prestidigitation as an at-will power. They also automatically gain the Parlor Tricks feat. Unfortunately, flower-bearing changelings are also particularly susceptible to magic and have -4 to Will saves.
Levitation: Flower-bearing changelings’ magical talent extends to a 1” levitation off of the ground at will, and as such, heavy armor does not influence their movement speed. This levitation can not be used over liquid, nor to avoid fall damage.

Vine-Bearing Changeling
+2 Str, Con, Int, Wis, OR Cha; -1 Dex While her human lineage allows her to be generally versatile, a vine-bearing changeling’s vines impede her flexibility.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 20’ The vines wrapped around her legs force a vine-bearing changeling to slow down.
Distinct Aura: Changelings have a strange and distinct presence about them that makes them very recognizable and noticeable. Changelings receive -4 to disguise checks and -2 to stealth checks.
Dual Origin: Changelings are considered both human and Fae for battle purposes. They have access to any human- or Fae-exclusive feats, as well as their own changeling-exclusive feats.
Hybrid: As a hybrid, changelings have better immunity and have +2 save against sickness and poison.
Vine Armor: The vines on a vine-bearing changeling’s skin count as natural armor, providing +1 AC. The vines’ light magical properties also allow the changeling a spell resistance of 8.
Thick Ropes: A vine-bearing changeling may cut off some of her vines to produce up to ten feet of the equivalent of nigh-unbreakable rope. Doing so causes 1d6 damage to the changeling, and she must wait two weeks for the vines to grow back before she may produce another rope. A talented armor-maker may bind a shield or armor with this special rope to provide +1 AC to the object, but this is a long process with expensive results.

Thorn-Bearing Changeling
+2 Str, Dex, Con, Int, OR Wis; -1 Cha While her human lineage allows her to be generally versatile, a thorn-bearing changeling’s appearance can ward off friendly contact.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 30’
Distinct Aura: Changelings have a strange and distinct presence about them that makes them very recognizable and noticeable. Changelings receive -4 to disguise checks and -2 to stealth checks.
Dual Origin: Changelings are considered both human and Fae for battle purposes. They have access to any human- or Fae-exclusive feats, as well as their own changeling-exclusive feats.
Hybrid: As a hybrid, changelings have better immunity and have +2 save against sickness and poison.
Bristle’s Bite: A thorn-bearing changeling’s thorns count as a natural weapon that grants the changeling the equivalent of two claw attacks for 1d4 damage each.
Thorns on End: The thorns on the back of the thorn-bearing changeling bristle at the detection of anything awry. Thorn-bearing changelings gain +2 to Perception checks and +2 to Sense Motive checks.

Elves:
Elves

Flavor Summary: Elves are nimble creatures who look rather human-like, though with strange ears, slightly lesser height, and wild hair colors. All elves originate from an island that has only recently been discovered by people of the mainland, and the elves here are known as Islander Elves. The Islanders lived in peace for many years until inner conflicts led to the near-eradication of magical elves. The few remaining magical elves and their many supporters set sail to leave the witch-hunting islanders behind, eventually coming across the mainland and settling there. Over the centuries, these elves became Mainland Elves and developed different traits from their island counterparts. Because of the eradication, Mainland Elves who bear magic are rare, and magic-wielding Islander Elves are all but unheard of. Mainland Elves developed a love of nature while the entirely magicless Islander Elves developed new and wonderful technologies.

Traits:

Mainland Elf
+2 Dex, +2 Wis, -2 Int Mainland elves are graceful creatures with vast amounts of experience, though they lack the penchant for invention of their Islander counterparts.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 30’
Bravery: Elves in general are a fearless bunch, either wise enough to properly calm themselves down or intelligent enough to have confidence in their survival. They gain +2 to saves against shaking, fear, and panic.
Tuning In: Mainland elves are naturally attuned to the inner workings of the world around them, but communicating directly with it takes much concentration. They may Speak With Plants/Animals up to twice per day.
Mainland Skills: Mainland elves know much about their local world and their environment. They gain +2 to Knowledge (Nature) checks, +2 to Knowledge (Local) checks, and +2 to Handle Animal checks.
Weapon Familiarity: Mainland elves are natural hunters with a respect for the circle of life. They are proficient with longbows and shortbows.

Islander Elf
+2 Dex, +2 Int, -2 Wis Islander elves are nimble and highly intelligent, though they are naive compared to their mainland counterparts.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 30’
Bravery: Elves in general are a fearless bunch, either wise enough to properly calm themselves down or intelligent enough to have confidence in their survival. They gain +2 to saves against shaking, fear, and panic.
Tuning In: Islander elves have a lot of connection with their ancestry and study up on the inventors of old, to the point that they have become attuned with those beyond life. They may cast Speak with Dead up to twice per day.
Island Skills: Islanders venerate history and invention, and their knowledge of tools is vast. They gain +2 to Knowledge (History) checks, +2 to Knowledge (Engineering) checks, and +2 to Disable Device checks.
Weapon Familiarity: Islander elves are industrious inventors who defend their culture with honor. They are proficient with all crossbows.

Fae:
The Fae

Flavor Summary: The Fae population consists of two opposing nations: the Seelie and the Unseelie. The Seelie are known for their decadence and honesty while the Unseelie are known for their toughness and loyalty. The two have no racial stat or trait differences. Beyond national loyalties, the Fae have little interest in morality. Fae are part humanoid and part plant, with green skin similar in texture to a stalk or stem along with vines and flowers that run along their bodies. They have wings which are butterfly- or moth-like in appearance, though Seelie tend toward the former and Unseelie toward the latter. Their hair and eye colors are most unusual.

Traits:

Fae
+2 Cha, +2 Int, -2 Con The Fae are a cunning and charming group, but they have many weak points.
Size: Medium
Base Speed: 30’
Levitation: Members of the Fae have 1” levitation off of the ground at will, and as such, heavy armor does not influence their movement speed. This levitation can not be used over liquid, but it does reduce fall damage by ⅓.
Luck of the Fae: Fae are not only tricky, but have the extraordinary power of fate on their side. Fae have +1 to all saving throws. They also have luck against magic spells, allowing them +10 spell resistance.
Plant Person: Fae are part-plant, with flowers and vines along their bodies. This gives them +2 stealth when in a setting surrounded by plant life, such as a forest. They are also capable of photosynthesis; one hour in direct sunlight allows them to have one less hour of sleep.
Faerie Charm: Faeries may attempt the spell Charm Person once per day, though the effect will last only twenty minutes if successful.
Faerie Weakness: Cold iron is the bane of Fae magic. Fae have -2 AC to attacks made with cold iron weapons.
Fae Wings: Fae Wings are very fragile and cannot be used for flight without the Fae Flight feat (WIP). They are particularly vulnerable to fire and acid. In addition, any stealth attack performed successfully against a Fae will be considered to have struck the Fae in the back, adding +4 damage to the attack.
Court Loyalty: A member of the Fae is always faithful to his court, be it Seelie or Unseelie.

Nereids:
Nereids

Flavor Summary: Descended from ancient gods of the ocean, Nereids are beautiful, small women who populate and rule the oceans. They have mastered the seas and formed many nations, most of which work in harmony to maintain balance in the ocean ecosystem. Nereids have blue or silver skin covered in small scales, along with hair and eyes in any monochrome shades. The shape of a Nereid's fins and the fien details of her appearance depends largely on where she lives, with deep sea Nereids often looking the most unearthly. They are always invited to Satyr nation's parties, though with one exception, the nations always politely decline.

Traits:

Nereid
+2 Int, +2 Con, -2 Wis, -2 Str Nereids are healthy beings with a thirst for knowledge, though they often lack worldly experience and aren’t physically powerful.
Size: Small
Base Movement: 30’
Ocean Dwellers: Nereids spend long amounts of time in the oceans from which they hail. They have a swim speed of 50’ and are amphibious, allowing them to breathe both air and water. They are accustomed to the depths of their homes, granting them 60’ darkvision.
Agile: Nereids are agile creatures who move through land and water with ease. They are granted +2 to Acrobatics checks and +2 to Swim checks.
Resourceful Mind: Nereids use their creative minds to carry them through trials. They are able to use their intelligence modifier in place of their wisdom modifier, but only when making skill checks.
Cold-Blooded: Nereids lack warm blood and are susceptible to cold environments. If kept in a cold environment for more than a day, Nereids act as if they are under the effect of a Lullaby spell until they enter a warmer climate. They may ward off this effect with a Will save, but they are at a disadvantage and must make an additional save for every extra day they spend in the environment.
Melodious: Nereids are known for their melodious voices and gain +4 to Perform (Sing) checks.

Satyrs:
Satyrs

Flavor Summary: Satyrs are tall humanoids with the feet, legs, and hors of goats. Most of them are male, though Satyresses are not unheard of. Satyrs have their origins in a Satyr nation by the sea whose population consists mostly of humble farmers. Vineyards are considered sacred places, and many Satyr temples will have a vineyard within them or nearby. Satyrs are a mostly nocturnal people, and many nights in their year are devoted to dancing, feasting, and merrymaking. Though the Satyr nation holds the highest concentration of these fun-loving folk, many choose to explore other places and indulge themselves in more of the world.

Traits:

Satyr
+2 Cha, +2 Str, +2 Con, -2 Dex Satyrs are a strong, hardy, fun-loving sort. That said, their hooves do nothing for dexterity.
Size: Medium
Base Movement: 20’ Satyrs are built to stand their ground, not to compete in goat-races.
Midnight Parties: Satyrs are used to doing all of their farming, harvesting, lounging about, and merrymaking at night. They are equipped with lowlight vision, but they are also afflicted with light sensitivity.
Entertaining Exaggeration: Talking to a satyr is such an experience on its own, it’s difficult to tell if he’s lying-- but he’s very good at the pan flute, so at least he’s entertaining. +2 to Bluff checks, +2 to Perform (Wind Instrument).
Blissful Madness: Once per encounter, and only at night, a satyr may enter an elated state known as Blissful Madness which lasts 1d4 rounds. During this state, the satyr gains the following circumstantial effects: +2 strength, +1 to Fortitude and Reflex saves, +5' movement, -2 AC. This state also distracts the satyr and opens him up to attacks of opportunity.
For the Love of Grapes: Satyrs thrive on wine and never miss out on it. Satyrs must consume at least one serving of it per day or risk the following penalties until wine is consumed: -2 Perception, -2 to initiative, -1 to Will and Fortitude saves. They cannot use Blissful Madness in this state.
Weapon Familiarity: When satyrs aren’t feasting and dancing, they’re probably farming. Satyrs are proficient with sickles and scythes.


Zashley wrote:
The six core races I have for this project are humans, Fae, satyrs, nymphs, elves, and changelings (half-Fae), the latter two of which are split into subraces. But I have no idea if they're all balanced with each other, much less with the core humans. I tried using a racial point system, but I'm unsure of the values of certain traits, and I've sort of made up a few things as I went along. I'm entirely spitballing here.

I want to come back to this tomorrow, but I have a quick question and a slow (involved) request.

You say that the core races for this project are "humans, Fae, satyrs, nymphs, elves, and changelings (half-Fae)," but then refer to nereids further down. Are these the nymphs you refer to here, or are these still coming?

Also, you talk about spitballing racial traits. Did you consult the Race Builder in the ARG? Because while it is apparently reputed to be very flawed, I think it's helpful to compare your design against their RP costs. Explicitly.

As in, +2 to any one of 5 stats, and -1 to the sixth, well... That's clearly worse than Human Heritage (0 RP for +2 to any one). And it's better than Weakness (-1 RP for +2 to one physical AND one mental ability, but a –4 penalty to a third). So you might rate Changeling ability mods as -0.5 RP, and specify it so directly in your doc. I hope this gives you an idea of what I mean.


bitter lily wrote:
Zashley wrote:
The six core races I have for this project are humans, Fae, satyrs, nymphs, elves, and changelings (half-Fae), the latter two of which are split into subraces. But I have no idea if they're all balanced with each other, much less with the core humans. I tried using a racial point system, but I'm unsure of the values of certain traits, and I've sort of made up a few things as I went along. I'm entirely spitballing here.

I want to come back to this tomorrow, but I have a quick question and a slow (involved) request.

You say that the core races for this project are "humans, Fae, satyrs, nymphs, elves, and changelings (half-Fae)," but then refer to nereids further down. Are these the nymphs you refer to here, or are these still coming?

Also, you talk about spitballing racial traits. Did you consult the Race Builder in the ARG? Because while it is apparently reputed to be very flawed, I think it's helpful to compare your design against their RP costs. Explicitly.

As in, +2 to any one of 5 stats, and -1 to the sixth, well... That's clearly worse than Human Heritage (0 RP for +2 to any one). And it's better than Weakness (-1 RP for +2 to one physical AND one mental ability, but a –4 penalty to a third). So you might rate Changeling ability mods as -0.5 RP, and specify it so directly in your doc. I hope this gives you an idea of what I mean.

Ah, yes, the nymphs would be the nereids. I changed their name at some point, but I must have forgotten to change it there.

I haven't consulted that particular race builder, but I'll be sure to. Thanks for the link! I guess I should say the "spitballing" comes from not being sure where to rank certain traits and just loosely trying to balance those based on my subjective (and probably biased) perspective.

Yeah, I get that. I was trying to create something that was like Human Heritage, but not quite as strong due to already having the choice of three subraces. I'm sort of looking for an alternative method, but that score looks fair for what it is at the moment.

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It's a bit hard to read all of them. Next time, can you put them in a google doc and stylize the text?


The Race Builder is okay as long as you understand it and don't rely solely on point costs to determine balance. XD

Broadly speaking, flexible abilities (select any feat, give a bonus to any ability score, etc.) tend to be potent choices, possibly more so than their point costs would imply. There's a reason that plain ol' vanilla humans are considered a good or great choice for almost any build in the game. As a general rule of thumb, try to not have more than one usefully flexible ability. Ability scores in particular should either be static (plus to this, minus to that), or come in specific variants (this group has +Con/+Cha/-Int, that one has +Dex/+Cha/-Int) designed for certain playstyles.

Also, ability scores should generally only go up or down in increments of 2 from racial adjustments.


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I also had a difficult time reading the abilities. Putting the feature names in bold would help a lot.

There are three separate changling (half-fey) races, but at least half of their features are the same. I suggest making this a single race, and then offering some alternate features that a player could swap out to reflect the different kinds. Make the changling race the one that is the most common in your world.

Allowing the player to choose from 5 of the 6 ability scores is nearly the same as choosing from all 6 ability scores. Just change that feature to the standard human feature.

I don't like that distinct aura is simply a penalty to two skills. Also, why do changlings have it when the fae do not?

There is a simpler way to write dual origin. "Battle purposed" implies that the effects only work during combat, but a human feat that helps skills (for example) wouldn't work outside of combat. Look up the similar half-elf feature and use the wording from that.

For better or worse, the are no saving throws against sickness in pathfinder so a bonus to such saves does nothing.

Never mind what you want flower power to do, a -4 on Will saves is severe and would immediately deter me from playing one.

It seems that levitation does nothing except remove the speed penalty from heavy armor, which is a strange ability for a forest creature covered in flowers. Does it also make it is the character doesn't eave footprints?

It is enough that vine armor grants a natural armor bonus. Generally, fewer enemies cast spells at low level, and SR of 8 probably won't matter once you hit 4th level.

Thick ropes leaves some unanswered questions. If I make a 10 ft vine rope and then make another two weeks later, if the fist rope still strong enough to support weight? How long and expensive is to augment an armor or shield? How long until the vines rot and don't work any more? I think a more interesting ability would be to allow the vines to wrap around branches, metal bars, etc as a move action or something so that the character can't fall.

For the elven bravery ability, the conditions you refer to are shaken, frightened, and panicked. It is enough to say that it gains a +2 bonus on saving throws against fear. Look up the halfling ability. Whenever possible, I copy and paste the wording of existing abilities and then modify it to suit my needs. In this way, the reader can recognize some of it and know basically how it works, and also recognize that some of it is different.


Ciaran Barnes wrote:

I also had a difficult time reading the abilities. Putting the feature names in bold would help a lot.

There are three separate changling (half-fey) races, but at least half of their features are the same. I suggest making this a single race, and then offering some alternate features that a player could swap out to reflect the different kinds. Make the changling race the one that is the most common in your world.

Allowing the player to choose from 5 of the 6 ability scores is nearly the same as choosing from all 6 ability scores. Just change that feature to the standard human feature.

I don't like that distinct aura is simply a penalty to two skills. Also, why do changlings have it when the fae do not?

There is a simpler way to write dual origin. "Battle purposed" implies that the effects only work during combat, but a human feat that helps skills (for example) wouldn't work outside of combat. Look up the similar half-elf feature and use the wording from that.

For better or worse, the are no saving throws against sickness in pathfinder so a bonus to such saves does nothing.

Never mind what you want flower power to do, a -4 on Will saves is severe and would immediately deter me from playing one.

It seems that levitation does nothing except remove the speed penalty from heavy armor, which is a strange ability for a forest creature covered in flowers. Does it also make it is the character doesn't eave footprints?

It is enough that vine armor grants a natural armor bonus. Generally, fewer enemies cast spells at low level, and SR of 8 probably won't matter once you hit 4th level.

Thick ropes leaves some unanswered questions. If I make a 10 ft vine rope and then make another two weeks later, if the fist rope still strong enough to support weight? How long and expensive is to augment an armor or shield? How long until the vines rot and don't work any more? I think a more interesting ability would be to allow the vines to wrap around branches, metal bars, etc as a move action or...

I'd definitely edit it and put the feature names in bold, but it seems that I can't edit that post anymore. I'm also working on Google documents for them.

True. I hadn't even considered making the changelings just one race, but that makes a lot more sense, and it would make sense to just change the stat thing to the human feature if it was all just one race.

There's meant to be a certain conflict of auras present in the changeling that is not present in full-blooded Fae or humans. It's the conflict and just general weirdness between the earthly and fey aspects of the changeling that makes her aura so loud, not merely the Fae aspect on its own. What's dislikeable about the -2 effects?

The Dual Lineage thing makes sense. I'll fix the wording.

That's fair. I was just worried that Flower Power without a major downside would be too powerful (the racial point guide I was using wasn't very lenient). Would -2 solve it?

I suppose Levitation would, logically, make it so that the creature leaves no footprints.

That is true. I'll remove the SR.

You've given me a lot of questions to think about on the vine thing, and I might have to get back to you on that. I'd suppose the vine rots after about two weeks. I haven't really calculated the expense or time cost of the augmentation, but it would probably involve some sort of method to keep the vines from rotting, which would add more time and expense. I'll consider doing the wrap ability in place of it if I can't come up with something, though.

Thank you! This is all really good feedback.


Hi again; I've unfortunately only had the chance to read the various changelings thoroughly.

(I did happen to marvel at ocean creatures who have a vulnerability to cold. Do they actually hail from a tropical sea with shallow water?)

You shouldn't pay a price for having a choice of subraces; players presumably have a choice of all of the races provided. You should pay only for abilities that your race has that other races (like humans) lack.

And yes, using variant racial traits is a great idea, but you'll have to be careful in wording them. Otherwise, someone will pick a 30-foot move, Vine Armor, and Thorns on End for their PC. (I'm continuing my comments based on the doc I'm reading.)

Hybrid: This should be +2 to Fortitude, for likely +1 RP - but NOT for the Flower-bearing subrace, with its penalty to Con! Compare...

ARG under Defense Racial Traits wrote:
Healthy (2 RP): Prerequisite: The race has at least a +2 racial bonus to Constitution; Benefit: Members of this race gain a +4 bonus on Fortitude saves against disease and poison, including magical diseases.

Flower Power: I agree that -4 to Will is too heavy a blow -- remember, that's the same as -8 Wisdom! And equally as odd as the Fort bonus given that it's for a race that might well put their +2 into Wisdom. (Not likely, I'll grant you, in the hands of a sane player, but...) And without knowing what Parlor Tricks does, I can't comment on the need for a drawback. Prestidigitation itself doesn't do much.

Levitation: Heavy armor should still down these folk; they're not all that magical. That is, levitation shouldn't work at all in heavy armor. It MAYBE should permit full movement while wearing medium armor, if proficient in it. I'd prefer that it didn't even function while wearing medium armor, but did prevent leaving tracks and permit traveling over bodies of water while wearing light or no armor.

Thick Ropes: You need to nail down lots and lots of specifics here. "Nigh-unbreakable" needs a specific hardness, HP, & DC for a Strength check. Cf Spider's silk rope with 6 HP and a DC 25 Strength check. (I don't know the hardness, if any.) And as you've agreed, "a long process with expensive results" needs to be defined.

End analysis thus far: You have some fun ideas. I'm taking a break in the frank hope that you'll do a second edition -- one that takes into account the ARG Race Builder, provides better specifics, and uses better styling (even if it's still posted here, rather than in a google doc). Pretty please?


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Thank you for your critique, bitter lily! I've taken all of what you've said into account.

Parlor Tricks is a 3.5 feat I'm incorporating here that essentially allows one to be constantly under the effects of Prestidigitation, useful for changing the appearances of spells. Since it's a feat plus an at-will spell, the guide I was using made it sound like...well, quite an expensive trait, to say the least.

I've sort of taken away the stat penalties for all of the changeling subraces. -1 didn't seem like much of a drawback anyway, and it just started to conflict with my intentions for the race as a whole.

The thing about nereids being cold-blooded made more sense in my head...I may have to think of a reason it wouldn't apply to their homes. I'll have to study up on how deep sea creatures do it without being warm-blooded. Maybe nereids secrete antifreeze while in the water? XD

All of the races, as currently up to date, are in these Docs (now with decent formatting):

Changelings

Elves

Fae

Nereids

Satyrs

I read the ARG Race Builder and tweaked the races to hopefully fit better with it. I tried to get as close to ten points as possible for each race, but I'm still shaky on some of the values.


I'm sorry I've been away, and I still count as "away," but I want to let you know I keep peeking at your ideas and wanting to think about them coherently.

RL has intervened, however: one of my dogs tore her ACL on Saturday evening, and came home from surgery yesterday. I've been distracted and frazzled all week.

But here's my "I'll come back to this."


I know it took time to get all of those docs posted, but it would be easier for anyone who reads them if they were all in one document. That way its only neccessary to click on one link/download on document.


Huge pet peeve of mine. Its not called a "stat", its called an ability score. "Changling characters gain a +2 racial bonus to one ability score of their choice at creation to represent their varied nature.


Yay, I have attention span again. There was a lot to read here! I do wish you'd included the RP costs. It makes it so much easier to see balance issues.

Changeling cts:
This write-up was a lot cleaner!

  • You need to list the type of each race. I believe Changelings, for instance, would be "Humanoid (changeling, fae, human)." At that point, you don't need to write up Faerie Blood as its own trait, although you may want to in order to keep the RP balanced. Did I mention that we can't know how many RP you assigned Faerie Blood?

  • Changelings Doc wrote:
    Magic Sense: Changelings seek those who share their magical abilities, and their strong sense of magic certainly helps. Changelings can use Detect Magic as a constant spell-like ability. The caster level of the spell-like ability is equal to the user's character level.

    How does this work? Can they literally never turn it off? Do they have to concentrate like spell-casters? For how many rounds to get details? I'd prefer an "at-will spell-like ability," meaning that they use it exactly as if they'd cast the spell. However, they can cast it as many times a day as they please. And then I have a final nit: I don't think that "user" is the right word here; it probably should be "changeling."

  • Changelings Doc wrote:
    Humanlike: Most changelings adapt to their human societies in spite of their unusual auras, and while they may be treated differently by those who surround them for some uncertain reason, they live life as humanlike as possible. Humanlike changelings earn an additional skill point at each level.

    I didn't like the flavor-text here. First of all, it's not an "uncertain reason," it's that nasty aura they have. And have had from birth; I assume that changelings suffer from much higher infant mortality and child abuse than human children, poor creatures. Secondly, and more importantly, you make it sound like the Humanlike trait is a choice made by an individual changeling, when in fact it's got to be a matter of genetics. I'd expect something more like:

    "Most changelings physically resemble their human parent more than their fae one, and adapt to human society even though they are treated differently by the humans who surround them. Humanlike changelings earn an additional skill point at each level."

  • Changelings Doc wrote:
    Alternate Racial Traits ... This trait replaces Humanlike and may not coincide with [X] or [Y].

    As a simple nit, you need to specify that "this trait" is a "this racial trait." And since you piled all of the alternate racial features into one trait, specifying "This racial trait replaces Humanlike" is logically a sufficient restriction. By the rules of PF race design, you can't pick two traits that replace the same original one!

  • Changelings Doc wrote:
    Flower-bearing: ... Flower-bearing changelings’ magical talent extends to a 1” levitation off of the ground at will, which allows them to avoid 1/2 of fall damage.

    I'd look at other things that mitigate fall damage, both for what they do and how they're worded. I have no alternate to offer, but I don't believe "avoid half of fall damage" is worded right. And what about leaving tracks? You might not want Flower-bearing Changelings to be fully trackless, since part of leaving a trail is disturbed branches, etc., but tracking a Flower-bearing Changeling who is levitating should logically take an increased DC -- by 5? 10? And when I compare what they get to the other subraces, it should be in line.

  • Changelings Doc wrote:
    Vine-Bearing: The vines on a vine-bearing changeling’s skin count as natural armor, providing +1 AC. A vine-bearing changeling may, as a swift action, extend a length of her vines to coil around a nearby pipe, branch, or similar protrusion. Doing this gives a vine-bearing changeling +4 to CMD when resisting a bull rush or trip attempt while on the ground....

    I think you should alter the typical language from the ARG to "when resisting a bull rush or trip attempt while anchored by her vine. The point is, it should work while halfway up a tree, but not in the middle of an empty room while standing on the ground.

  • I'm being called away, but I'll come back to the other races!


    For anyone: How do at-will abilities trigger? Would you need to trigger Levitation as an immediate action, swift action, or what to have it reduce falling damage?

    More Changeling cts:
  • I'm not at all sure how the subrace abilities balance against each other and Humanlike.

  • Finally, do Changelings have the Fae's Faerie Weakness to Cold iron? If not, why not?
  • Elves cts:
    Your elves do not have low-light vision?

  • Elves doc wrote:
    Natural Attunement: Mainland elves are naturally attuned to the inner workings of the world around them, but communicating directly with it takes much concentration. They may cast Speak With Plants/Animals up to four times per day.

    Are you letting an elf cast Speak with Plants 4x/day and Speak with Animals 4x/day as well? Or will 2 castings of each spell end the uses for that day? It's not clear.

  • Elves doc wrote:
    Quick Reactions: The elven woods are prone to invasion from unharmonious sorts. Thankfully, mainland elves are always ready. They receive +4 to initiative rolls.

    I'd like to point out that this is a lot more powerful than the ARG's Quick Reactions, since that's getting Improved Initiative as a bonus feat for 2 RP. (And there's some, I'm sure, who'd argue that that's underpriced!) Your version permits an elf character to also take Improved Initiative.

  • Elves doc wrote:
    Weapon Familiarity: Mainland elves are natural hunters with a respect for the circle of life. They are proficient with longbows and shortbows.

    I hope this includes composite bows. But did your elves never invent the amazing Elven Curve Blade? :)

  • Elves doc wrote:
    Jumper: Islander elves know how to reach the farthest nooks and crannies of their steam-powered, mechanical world. They are always considered to have a running start when making Acrobatics checks to jump.

    Huh? We RL humans have a highly mechanical world, and we have bred ourselves into a race of powerful... couch potatoes. I just don't get the connection. Instead of talking about a "steam-powered, mechanical world," maybe you should talk about their youth sports programs or something.

  • Elves doc wrote:
    Weapon Familiarity: Islander elves are industrious inventors who defend their culture with honor. They are proficient with all crossbows.

    I definitely hope that this includes repeating crossbows, the greatest weakness (IMHO) of typical crossbow familiarity.

  • Fae cts:
  • Fae doc wrote:
    Levitation: Members of the Fae have 1” levitation off of the ground at will, and as such, heavy armor does not influence their movement speed. This levitation can not be used to travel over liquid, but it does reduce fall damage by ½. Levitation does not work while wearing heavy armor.

    I think the editing blooper here is apparent just from my quote. I like "reduce fall damage by half" better as wording, FWIW.

  • Fae doc wrote:
    Plant Person: Fae are part-plant, with flowers and vines along their bodies. This gives them +4 to Stealth checks when in a forest. They are also capable of photosynthesis; one hour in direct sunlight during the day allows them to take one less hour of sleep the following night.

    The Stealth bonus might easily apply in other natural environments, don't you think? For instance, in tall grass-lands, where humans would still tend to stand out, or in swamps.

    As for photosynthesis, I never took even high school biology, so I'm easily prepared to admit I'm wrong here. But I thought that plants do sleep. I'd think that it's food that photosynthesis should reduce. And if you want to keep the bennie as is, what's the limit on the number of hours reduction in sleep? (IMHO, it should be at least two.)

  • Magic Sense: See my comment on the Changeling ability.
  • And whew! I'm done for tonight, although I'm sorry to be. Your Nereids and Satyrs docs are protected in some fashion, and I don't have a google account.

    My conclusion stands: some fun ideas!


    Good to see some free changeling, elfling, and fae-ful stuff out there... (too bad about the nereiding and satyring stuff not showing up tho). ;)


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    Since the host seems to have left us to party on alone:

    What do you DO with all of the free swag? :)


    bitter lily wrote:

    Since the host seems to have left us to party on alone:

    What do you DO with all of the free swag? :)

    And that host kept all the Nereids and Satyrs to itself- tha' cadful scoundrel. ;p

    @bitter lily: Heh, why to have a horde of hoards of free swag, of course. :)

    Well, that and...

    how's about letting youse in onna a wee sorta secret? ;):
    Dat's how an aberration get their... erm, tentycles... and other stuff. :)

    In actuality, it be this ingrained habit to points out all that wonderful free swag from Paizo; from there... third-party free stuffs; and now, homebrewed free things (mostly downloadable...) also gets lumped in there. :)


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    Here4daFreeSwag wrote:
    What do you DO with all of the free swag? :)

    And that host kept all the Nereids and Satyrs to itself- tha' cadful scoundrel. ;p

    @bitter lily: Heh, why to have a horde of hoards of free swag, of course. :)

    Well, that and... ** spoiler omitted **

    In actuality, it be this ingrained habit to points out all that wonderful free swag from Paizo; from there... third-party free stuffs; and now, homebrewed free things (mostly downloadable...) also gets lumped in there. :)

    <grin> Thanks! And yes, shockingly bad form to leave your own party going and depart with the pretty girls... and boys!


    Preliminary question:
    Are types and subtypes not a thing in your homebrew?

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