paizo.com Recent Posts in Narrikpaizo.com Recent Posts in Narrik2015-02-11T20:03:17Z2015-02-11T20:03:17ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikCuraighhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#432015-02-21T22:34:53Z2015-02-21T22:34:53Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">Monica Marlowe wrote:</div><blockquote><p> <i>Spikes protrude in place of a neck on this long-limbed headless bipedal figure. Jagged teeth line the open mouth in its chest as its whip-like tongue flicks between its lips.</i></p>
<p><b>Narrik CR 7</b> </blockquote><p>Congratulations Monica!
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I loved this description and this critter never went down from there. Scary looking critter to play on scary tactics. </p>
<p>Good luck in the Top 4!</p>Monica Marlowe wrote:Spikes protrude in place of a neck on this long-limbed headless bipedal figure. Jagged teeth line the open mouth in its chest as its whip-like tongue flicks between its lips.
Narrik CR 7
Congratulations Monica!
I loved this description and this critter never went down from there. Scary looking critter to play on scary tactics. Good luck in the Top 4!Curaigh2015-02-21T22:34:53ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikMonica Marlowehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#422015-02-18T16:42:22Z2015-02-18T16:42:22Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">FireHawk wrote:</div><blockquote><p> I save this until after the voting...</p>
<p>for some reason this is what your description brought to mind</p>
<p>http://www.greatamericanink.com/Webstore/images/P/82473.jpg </blockquote><p>Yeah, I love Gossamer, but he was definitely not what I was envisioning while making narrik :-) If you do an extended search of "Blemmyas" or "Blemmyes" he shows up as do some very weird hand drawings from Pliny the Elder.FireHawk wrote:I save this until after the voting...
for some reason this is what your description brought to mind
http://www.greatamericanink.com/Webstore/images/P/82473.jpg
Yeah, I love Gossamer, but he was definitely not what I was envisioning while making narrik :-) If you do an extended search of "Blemmyas" or "Blemmyes" he shows up as do some very weird hand drawings from Pliny the Elder.Monica Marlowe2015-02-18T16:42:22ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikRJGradyhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#412015-02-18T07:27:29Z2015-02-18T07:27:29Z<p>Monster Level Achieved: Tékumel</p>Monster Level Achieved: TékumelRJGrady2015-02-18T07:27:29ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikFireHawkhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#402015-02-18T16:33:23Z2015-02-18T07:15:04Z<p>I save this until after the voting...</p>
<p>for some reason this is what your description brought to mind</p>
<p>http://www.greatamericanink.com/Webstore/images/P/82473.jpg</p>I save this until after the voting...
for some reason this is what your description brought to mind
http://www.greatamericanink.com/Webstore/images/P/82473.jpgFireHawk2015-02-18T07:15:04ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikAndrew Marlowehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#392015-02-19T01:28:06Z2015-02-18T04:46:20Z<p>Way to go Dear!</p>Way to go Dear!Andrew Marlowe2015-02-18T04:46:20ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikMonica Marlowehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#382015-02-18T05:40:01Z2015-02-18T03:58:28Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">Andrew Black wrote:</div><blockquote><p> Jeeze...I don't think the Andrew's will ever hear the end of this! CONGRATS!!!!!
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</blockquote><p>I don't know about that, I wouldn't be here if he hadn't started this journey first. I especially wouldn't be here if he didn't keep saying things like "that's not scary, challenging, exciting or SuperStar enough, go back and do more."Andrew Black wrote:Jeeze...I don't think the Andrew's will ever hear the end of this! CONGRATS!!!!!
I don't know about that, I wouldn't be here if he hadn't started this journey first. I especially wouldn't be here if he didn't keep saying things like "that's not scary, challenging, exciting or SuperStar enough, go back and do more."Monica Marlowe2015-02-18T03:58:28ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikMonica Marlowehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#372015-02-18T12:11:36Z2015-02-18T03:56:06Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">Feros wrote:</div><blockquote><p> Pressure, pressure! I'm sure your next contribution will be so brilliant, it puts all else to shame!</p>
<p>>:)</p>
<p>Seriously, congratulations mamaursula! You are definitely one of the bright points in this competition every year and I am overjoyed you have moved on to Round 4! Brilliant! :D </blockquote><p>Man, I hope so.
<p>Seriously though thank you so much for your support.</p>Feros wrote:Pressure, pressure! I'm sure your next contribution will be so brilliant, it puts all else to shame!
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Seriously, congratulations mamaursula! You are definitely one of the bright points in this competition every year and I am overjoyed you have moved on to Round 4! Brilliant! :D
Man, I hope so. Seriously though thank you so much for your support.Monica Marlowe2015-02-18T03:56:06ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikAndrew Blackhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#362015-02-18T04:45:18Z2015-02-18T02:31:07Z<p>Jeeze...I don't think the Andrew's will ever hear the end of this! CONGRATS!!!!!</p>Jeeze...I don't think the Andrew's will ever hear the end of this! CONGRATS!!!!!Andrew Black2015-02-18T02:31:07ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikFeroshttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#352015-02-17T23:00:23Z2015-02-17T23:00:23Z<p>Pressure, pressure! I'm sure your next contribution will be so brilliant, it puts all else to shame!</p>
<p>>:)</p>
<p>Seriously, congratulations mamaursula! You are definitely one of the bright points in this competition every year and I am overjoyed you have moved on to Round 4! Brilliant! :D</p>Pressure, pressure! I'm sure your next contribution will be so brilliant, it puts all else to shame!
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Seriously, congratulations mamaursula! You are definitely one of the bright points in this competition every year and I am overjoyed you have moved on to Round 4! Brilliant! :DFeros2015-02-17T23:00:23ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikLady Firedovehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#342015-02-18T03:55:02Z2015-02-17T22:56:41Z<p>Congrats, Monica! Although I didn't end up voting for your Narrik... (I obsessed over this for a while, but it ended up fifth on my list.)... You're the contestant I would have been most crushed to see leave the competition. You give so much to this community on these forums. You created my second-favorite map, and I'm mentally creating a campaign around it. Your work has been consistently excellent and flavorful, showing great attention to detail, and I can't wait to see what your encounter brings! No pressure. ;)</p>Congrats, Monica! Although I didn't end up voting for your Narrik... (I obsessed over this for a while, but it ended up fifth on my list.)... You're the contestant I would have been most crushed to see leave the competition. You give so much to this community on these forums. You created my second-favorite map, and I'm mentally creating a campaign around it. Your work has been consistently excellent and flavorful, showing great attention to detail, and I can't wait to see what your encounter...Lady Firedove2015-02-17T22:56:41ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikMonica Marlowehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#332015-02-17T22:58:36Z2015-02-16T23:59:03Z<p>Thank you all for your comments, I really appreciate it!</p>
<p>Last round I tried to address all the comments, this time I'm just going to tell you all the story of </p>
<p>[Spoiler omitted]</p>Thank you all for your comments, I really appreciate it!
Last round I tried to address all the comments, this time I'm just going to tell you all the story of
[Spoiler omitted]Monica Marlowe2015-02-16T23:59:03ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikLady Firedovehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#322015-02-17T22:58:07Z2015-02-16T22:49:27Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">Christopher Wasko wrote:</div><blockquote> Last points, I agree about sticking to traditional plurals when possible, and I’m a little unsure whether it ends with “-ck” or “-k,” since it switches back and forth between links and references. </blockquote><p>Huh. I hadn't noticed this, but it does look like they misspelled Narrik with a "-ck" on the main RPG Superstar page. Who do we ask about fixing that?
<p>I assume Narrik is the correct spelling, since it looks like that's the way it's spelled everywhere Monica wrote it.</p>Christopher Wasko wrote:Last points, I agree about sticking to traditional plurals when possible, and I’m a little unsure whether it ends with “-ck” or “-k,” since it switches back and forth between links and references.
Huh. I hadn't noticed this, but it does look like they misspelled Narrik with a "-ck" on the main RPG Superstar page. Who do we ask about fixing that? I assume Narrik is the correct spelling, since it looks like that's the way it's spelled everywhere Monica wrote it.Lady Firedove2015-02-16T22:49:27ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikChristopher Waskohttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#312015-02-16T22:05:41Z2015-02-16T22:05:41Z<p>Brief critiques as I prep for the possibility of advancing, focusing on feedback that is hopefully new and constructive to future designs.
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I envy your concise writing and clean use of rules. I strive to design like that (as evidenced by my monster, my biggest personal battle is overcomplicated mechanics), and I think this monster is a beautifully-packaged, thematically-connected creature. My main issue with it is entirely a personal one: I really dislike the fear mechanics beyond shaken, since they remove PC autonomy and trigger my “why should I be frightened just because the GM is telling me I’m frightened” response. I prefer fear mechanics that make me, as a player, afraid like my character is without railroading my decisions (the mummy’s despair is a decent, although still flawed, example of this). I was disappointed to see a monster that so heavily relied on these distasteful mechanics, but the elegance of its packaging ameliorated the issue. Last points, I agree about sticking to traditional plurals when possible, and I’m a little unsure whether it ends with “-ck” or “-k,” since it switches back and forth between links and references.
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Like Gabriel, you have been a consistent frontrunner, and I look forward to seeing an equally creative, evocative, and elegant encounter next round if you advance. Good luck!</p>Brief critiques as I prep for the possibility of advancing, focusing on feedback that is hopefully new and constructive to future designs.
I envy your concise writing and clean use of rules. I strive to design like that (as evidenced by my monster, my biggest personal battle is overcomplicated mechanics), and I think this monster is a beautifully-packaged, thematically-connected creature. My main issue with it is entirely a personal one: I really dislike the fear mechanics beyond shaken,...Christopher Wasko2015-02-16T22:05:41ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: Narrikmplindustrieshttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#302015-02-15T18:08:31Z2015-02-15T18:08:31Z<p>[Spoiler omitted]
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I'm not a fan conceptually, as this is just another monster that will randomly attack the PC for "reasons." There's no underlying goal or agenda that makes them compelling beyond a random encounter in the dark. It's also so bizarre looking that, I can't help but find it a bit silly.</p>
<p>I like the way it tastes fear and how that interacts with its other powers. I kind of wish it didn't also have Darkvision, though. I'd have liked it a lot more, from a world building perspective, if it could <i>only</i> see fear.</p>
<p>I don't like Alien Anatomy, which makes it immune to precision damage, screwing swashbucklers and Rogues (two classes that definitely do not need screwing) but not critical hits. And Erratic Demise just feels bizarre for the sake of being bizarre. </p>
<p>Saliva is good, but it's not clear how it's delivered. Will a bite do it? Can it lick its claws to pass it on? Is it carried in the ensnaring venom? Speaking of Ensnaring Venom, what does "increases the accumulated fear effect" mean? Or rather, I know what it means, but that's not the proper way to word that at all.</p>
<p>Where it scores big with me, though, is how fun it would be to fight these. They are adequately dangerous (maybe a little bit light on damage) when played typically, but if their full abilities are utilized (ensaring venom to glue people down, then spring attack in and out until they are panicked but unable to run), the fight becomes very dynamic. They'd be really dangerous without being frustrating, as counters exist (readying attacks, pinning them down somehow, having good enough saves, etc.).</p>
<p>I'm torn on this one. I don't like its place in the world as, essentially just a combat waiting to happen, but its actual combat abilities are really well thought out. There are some errors, but nothing unforgivable. It's the best I've seen so far, but it's only the fourth I've seen. It's not sure thing but I may end up voting for it if nothing else impresses me more.</p>[Spoiler omitted]
I'm not a fan conceptually, as this is just another monster that will randomly attack the PC for "reasons." There's no underlying goal or agenda that makes them compelling beyond a random encounter in the dark. It's also so bizarre looking that, I can't help but find it a bit silly.
I like the way it tastes fear and how that interacts with its other powers. I kind of wish it didn't also have Darkvision, though. I'd have liked it a lot more, from a world building...mplindustries2015-02-15T18:08:31ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikRJGradyhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#292015-02-14T03:32:14Z2015-02-14T03:32:14Z<p>Well, they raise their young in communal nests and the young grow up in a matter of weeks, so that's strange. Since they grow so rapidly, they aren't really limited in size by their birth weight; you could throw the giant simple template on one, no problem, and just go up from there.</p>Well, they raise their young in communal nests and the young grow up in a matter of weeks, so that's strange. Since they grow so rapidly, they aren't really limited in size by their birth weight; you could throw the giant simple template on one, no problem, and just go up from there.RJGrady2015-02-14T03:32:14ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikGarrick Williamshttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#282015-02-13T15:12:17Z2015-02-13T15:12:17Z<p>Rather interesting and creepy. They have really interesting abilities that all synergize rather well with one another. They have a fear aura and a fear spit special attack. They make enemies run away from them, but they're really fast and have an ensnaring ranged attack. They have blindsight against feared foes (my favorite ability) to find prey that hides. I can picture hunting strategies terrifying prey towards a trapped area.</p>
<p>My biggest issue is that for a frightful monster, it's not very scary. It doesn't do much damage. A lone level 7 PC could take the monster easily. However, it would go extremely well combined with another monster. It also seems weird that they have alien anatomy and yet they give birth and raise their young like a human. Though, I must admit that imagining a pregnant female narrik disturbs me.</p>Rather interesting and creepy. They have really interesting abilities that all synergize rather well with one another. They have a fear aura and a fear spit special attack. They make enemies run away from them, but they're really fast and have an ensnaring ranged attack. They have blindsight against feared foes (my favorite ability) to find prey that hides. I can picture hunting strategies terrifying prey towards a trapped area.
My biggest issue is that for a frightful monster, it's not very...Garrick Williams2015-02-13T15:12:17ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikOceanshieldwolfhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#272015-02-13T13:40:09Z2015-02-13T13:40:09Z<p>I find this creature a jumble of unrelated ideas mashed together to create something that makes little sense to me.</p>
<p>Not a fan of the headless mouth in chest creature. Feels a bit silly.</p>
<p>The social lore makes no sense - they apparently have two genders, and children, and roam like transients in packs that fight when they get too numerous and care for their young communally. Sounds pretty cohesive to me.</p>
<p>So they taste fear, explode, possess psychoactive saliva AND alien anatomy? I don't mind creatures with a bunch of abilities, but these don't work to a theme, largely because I don't get a feel for a hulking 6 foot headless biped that apparently sneaks around narrow cracks in caves.</p>
<p>Moreover, the increasing fear effects just scream out for an ability to take advantage of that, but mostly it just makes you easier to hunt if you get away.</p>
<p>There are some exciting ideas (would like to see the explosion do something more exciting than just more of the same), and some nice writing, but as a whole I'm not a fan. As a shallow aesthete the visual/description turned me off immediately. It beggars my verisimilitude.</p>I find this creature a jumble of unrelated ideas mashed together to create something that makes little sense to me.
Not a fan of the headless mouth in chest creature. Feels a bit silly.
The social lore makes no sense - they apparently have two genders, and children, and roam like transients in packs that fight when they get too numerous and care for their young communally. Sounds pretty cohesive to me.
So they taste fear, explode, possess psychoactive saliva AND alien anatomy? I don't mind...Oceanshieldwolf2015-02-13T13:40:09ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikKiel Howellhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#262015-02-12T23:22:39Z2015-02-12T23:22:39Z<p>Interesting. It just seems...weird! It still didn't take any points away from it for me...I wonder if Adam or another judge would like to chime in on the design philosophy behind that value in that table?</p>Interesting. It just seems...weird! It still didn't take any points away from it for me...I wonder if Adam or another judge would like to chime in on the design philosophy behind that value in that table?Kiel Howell2015-02-12T23:22:39ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikJacob W. Michaelshttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#252015-02-12T23:20:05Z2015-02-12T23:20:05Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">theheadkase wrote:</div><blockquote> CR 7 is closer than CR 6 in other entries, but 10 HD still seems odd. </blockquote><p>10 HD is the appropriate number for a CR 7 aberration per the monster creation table.theheadkase wrote:CR 7 is closer than CR 6 in other entries, but 10 HD still seems odd.
10 HD is the appropriate number for a CR 7 aberration per the monster creation table.Jacob W. Michaels2015-02-12T23:20:05ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikKiel Howellhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#242015-02-12T23:00:03Z2015-02-12T23:00:03Z<p>The description makes me think of those iron spiked disciple killers in the Mistborn series. Not bad, but if you didn't intend that it IS something to be aware of.</p>
<p>Ooo taste fear...sounds cool.</p>
<p>An aberration! </p>
<p>CR 7 is closer than CR 6 in other entries, but 10 HD still seems odd. </p>
<p>Finally, a full attack routine!</p>
<p>Any underground...like in a lake of magma? :)</p>
<p>Ooo, an ensaring AND psychotropic spittle? Which ties right in to their taste fear thing...nice.</p>
<p>Erratic Demise will be divisive. Some folks are ok with dying attacks...others see it as a GM saying "screw you"</p>
<p>Taste fear is awesome and I can totally see these creatures being used as bloodhounds of sorts by stronger, fear inducing creatures.</p>
<p>Overall, I really like this nasty critter. Nothing overtly stands out as flawed, it is flavorful, and I get lots of ideas from it. Well done Monica!</p>The description makes me think of those iron spiked disciple killers in the Mistborn series. Not bad, but if you didn't intend that it IS something to be aware of.
Ooo taste fear...sounds cool.
An aberration!
CR 7 is closer than CR 6 in other entries, but 10 HD still seems odd.
Finally, a full attack routine!
Any underground...like in a lake of magma? :)
Ooo, an ensaring AND psychotropic spittle? Which ties right in to their taste fear thing...nice.
Erratic Demise will be divisive....Kiel Howell2015-02-12T23:00:03ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: Narrikfrank gorihttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#232015-02-12T19:19:20Z2015-02-12T19:19:20Z<p>[Spoiler omitted]</p>
<p><b>Good</b> This feels familiar in a previous edition type of feel, which is good for the grognard vote. Mechanically sound everything with formatting and mechanics look on point to me, I like the gobs of sticky tanglefoot effect.
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<b>Bad and Ugly</b> Mouth out of chest just doesn't do it for me, poison is over used, and I'd almost rather see this as an insect aberration feels wrong.
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<b>Overall</b> B as this is on the bubble of my vote and I'm giving you bonus point for being one of my favorites from the previous rounds. This would pass with 8 votes but with 4 you're lucky the overall crop of monsters is not impressing me this year.</p>[Spoiler omitted]
Good This feels familiar in a previous edition type of feel, which is good for the grognard vote. Mechanically sound everything with formatting and mechanics look on point to me, I like the gobs of sticky tanglefoot effect.
Bad and Ugly Mouth out of chest just doesn't do it for me, poison is over used, and I'd almost rather see this as an insect aberration feels wrong.
Overall B as this is on the bubble of my vote and I'm giving you bonus point for being one of my favorites...frank gori2015-02-12T19:19:20ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikJeff Leehttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#222019-05-20T21:54:57Z2015-02-12T06:46:42Z<div class="messageboard-quotee">Jacob W. Michaels wrote:</div><blockquote><br />
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Saves -/+ (Jeff, its good save is actually a touch low – consistent with a CR 6 creature; while the poor saves are consistent with CR 8 creatures, not 10, unless I’m misreading something)</blockquote><p>You are correct, sir. My eyes must have jumped a line in the table when I was consulting it. Happens sometimes when I'm reading off a screen rather than out of a book.Jacob W. Michaels wrote:Saves -/+ (Jeff, its good save is actually a touch low – consistent with a CR 6 creature; while the poor saves are consistent with CR 8 creatures, not 10, unless I’m misreading something)
You are correct, sir. My eyes must have jumped a line in the table when I was consulting it. Happens sometimes when I'm reading off a screen rather than out of a book.Jeff Lee2015-02-12T06:46:42ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikThunderfroghttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#212015-02-12T06:17:35Z2015-02-12T06:17:35Z<p>See also: Pinsir, The Stag Beetle Pokemon.</p>
<p>I liked how your abilities and mechanics played out, but I was constantly turned off by your word choices in the descriptive texts. </p>
<p>I like the idea of the monster, a fear taster that can strike and be gone, especially in a tunnel or underground, that can pretty much negate any attempt to foil it from locating his target as long as they are scared.. but the psychotropic poisons that are contact based, the giant full body mouth thats only 1d6 damage and can't deliver it's poison.. </p>
<p>Also, the above poster is right. This monster seems heavily inspired by a previous entry.</p>
<p>Creativity and Theme: 2/5</p>
<p>Running this monster as a DM:4/5</p>
<p>Encountering this monster as a complex/story encounter: 3/5</p>
<p>Encountering this monster as a random encounter: 1/5</p>
<p>10 / 20 pts.</p>See also: Pinsir, The Stag Beetle Pokemon.
I liked how your abilities and mechanics played out, but I was constantly turned off by your word choices in the descriptive texts.
I like the idea of the monster, a fear taster that can strike and be gone, especially in a tunnel or underground, that can pretty much negate any attempt to foil it from locating his target as long as they are scared.. but the psychotropic poisons that are contact based, the giant full body mouth thats only 1d6 damage...Thunderfrog2015-02-12T06:17:35ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikCthulhudrewhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#202015-02-12T02:31:53Z2015-02-12T02:31:53Z<p>That's another thing I liked that I forgot to mention, RJGrady- I like how the Narrik's feat choices and abilities sort of suggest this thing strikes fast and deadly, without having to come out and directly state tactics for it. It reminds me of the sort of thing you'd find in a horror movie- creature leaping out of the shadows and striking before anyone has a chance to process.</p>That's another thing I liked that I forgot to mention, RJGrady- I like how the Narrik's feat choices and abilities sort of suggest this thing strikes fast and deadly, without having to come out and directly state tactics for it. It reminds me of the sort of thing you'd find in a horror movie- creature leaping out of the shadows and striking before anyone has a chance to process.Cthulhudrew2015-02-12T02:31:53ZRe: Forums: Round 3: Create a Bestiary entry: NarrikRJGradyhttps://paizo.com/threads/rzs2ryf4?Narrik#192015-02-12T02:21:31Z2015-02-12T02:21:31Z<p>It's definitely an aberration. Good on that. I'd make two editorial suggestions. First, Taste Fear should be Sense Fear, I think. Second, there should be some way to kill it that interferes with its combustive decomposition. I like that it has three general themes working together: fear, speed, and a gnarly, dangerous appearance.</p>It's definitely an aberration. Good on that. I'd make two editorial suggestions. First, Taste Fear should be Sense Fear, I think. Second, there should be some way to kill it that interferes with its combustive decomposition. I like that it has three general themes working together: fear, speed, and a gnarly, dangerous appearance.RJGrady2015-02-12T02:21:31Z