Aldern Foxglove

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Star Voter Season 7

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Trekkie90909 wrote:
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Rapier of Shining Influence

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First paragraph is well written and tells me you know rapiers, but tells me nothing of your item’s special magical abilities. IMO the buff should be a morale bonus to play into the influence/dazzling display/charisma theme. I like your counter, but like the rest of your description it feels like gilding; try to integrate the description into your mechanics.

The ‘during combat’ tag does not really add to the description; on the other hand something about having to use the ability before the attack roll is made...

Thanks for taking the time to critique my item. I greatly appreciate the feedback, especially the point of the bonus being a morale bonus, d'oh.