[Razor Coast]Sometimes a little phrase just grabs you

[Louis Agresta]

So I'm doing one last development pass on the Razor Coast manuscript, mostly because I'm anxious to please and a little OCD. That said I keep coming across these little vivid imagery gems that slide a frisson down my spine. Thought I'd share one.

Otherwise inform the PCs they hear screams, abruptly cut off, and that a fountain of blood jets from the ship’s hold like a whale spout. Then silence: the wind rustles in the rigging. Wood creaks.

I know it's a small thing, simply written, but the phrasing makes "writer me" smile.

Do it for anyone else?

[terraleon]

Louis Agresta wrote:

Do it for anyone else?

Ding! :D

[FlynnK]

In a word, atmospheric....to say the least!

[Oliver von Spreckelsen]

shiver...

[Orthos]

I approve.

[golem101]

Just give me the thing already! I need my Logue fix!

[Louis Agresta]

Only if you ask in pirate. May I recommend this?

[golem101]

Just give me th' thin' already! I need me Logue fix!
Ya horn swogglin' bilge rat!

[Hazgarr the Dwarven Pirate]

HARRRRRRRR. Now 'AT'S more like it!

[Louis Agresta]

Not to be a tease, but...

In the dank salt-stained dark below, the party discovers corpses stuffed into the slowly filling bilge. They float like obscene dumplings in a sour ocean stew, bloated and weeks rotten.

:)

[TriOmegaZero]

I had a flashback to Army of Darkness.

[mach1.9pants]

awesome stuff, MORE!

Xmas can't come fast enough :D

[Mark Moreland]

Louis Agresta wrote:

Not to be a tease, but...

In the dank salt-stained dark below, the party discovers corpses stuffed into the slowly filling bilge. They float like obscene dumplings in a sour ocean stew, bloated and weeks rotten.

:)

Oh how I've missed Mr. Logue's imagery!

[Shadowborn]

Nothing better than invoking a player's sense of smell and taste in the same line.

Spoiler:

Blech. That one got me a little queasy.

[Mir]

I keep waiting for more details on the Kickstarter!!!!! Hurry Hurry!

[Joe Wells]

Here's a little phrase that just grabbed me:

Louis Agresta wrote:

... one last development pass on the Razor Coast manuscript...

You flirt.

[carborundum]

'tis great stuff, Lou, and no mistake. Arr!
Like a big, steaming Seamus Heaney poem :-)

[Turin the Mad]

Niiiiice, me likey.

[Orthos]

Please, sirrah, canna have summah?

[Louis Agresta]

Bah! Tulita dock scum - ye be spendin' it all on dragonsmoke, belike!