Wicht |
Now for your reading pleasure at PATHFINDER CHRONICLER...
You first met her in A Harvest to Remember.
Now ARYSTA is Back!
And she's younger and meaner than ever.
Visit the town of Wolf's Ear and learn what secrets this quaint village holds.
. . . Discover the mystery of THE SILVER LADY and how a single coin can unexpectedly change a girl's life.
What will it cost her? What sacrifices will she make? In order to keep THE SILVER LADY
The Silver Lady, A story told in four parts. Don't miss any of them!
Wicht |
In other words, I have a new story up at Pathfinder Chronicler called The Silver Lady. Its fairly longish (having four parts: all available now to read) but I hope you guys enjoy it. (The link above takes you to part one - the other three parts are hyperlinked from one to four)
And if anyone else is interested in submitting their own Golarion short stories (or even novels) to the site, we would be more than happy to have you. The pay isn't much but the key to writing is to write (often) and we'll help give you a platform to practice on, complete with editors and advice.
Wicht |
Hmm. I just had a look at your 'Harvest to remember' and you people never seem to update those pieces, as it looks the same as when I last saw it. I could have sworn I emailed some feedback/thoughts.
Hey Charles. You did email some thoughts about it to Zuxius and he shared them with me. I was fairly happy with that story as it was for what it was; and knew the answers (privately) to a lot of the questions you raised in your email*. I wasn't really planning on continually updating it**, so yes it is the same as last you read it. But if you wanted to discuss your thoughts on it (and mine), I would be more than happy to. My email is wicht at uplink dot net.
*That first Arysta story was mainly written as a short exercise in misdirection. Nevertheless there is an internal consistancy to the piece, enough so to satisfy me as the author. I didn't feel compelled to explain everything in the story just so long as I knew why it happened the way it did.
*If I constantly rewrote every thing I wrote until I was 100% satisfied with it, I would still be rewriting my stuff from the 4th grade. :D
Edit: I did, however, appreciate your interest in it and your thoughts. Please feel free to continue to offer them.
Zuxius |
Hmm. I just had a look at your 'Harvest to remember' and you people never seem to update those pieces, as it looks the same as when I last saw it. I could have sworn I emailed some feedback/thoughts.
Charles, at Pathfinder Chronicler only the author can go back and change the work that is posted. We do a lot of editing and suggestions, but in the end the author has complete control over their own work.
Your suggestions were very well thought out and quite often spotted blindsides that three editors didn't catch. At the same token you pointed out what three editors caught but the writer disregarded for their own prefernce (I laughed at that time because it felt like vindication).
If you looked over my pieces for instance, I could act on your comments. I cannot speak for the rest of the authors.
And that's the story. We do all we can to help the author, but in the end they will put up whatever they darn well please. We consciously chose this way of editing because we are a fan fiction site and we want the authors to see their creative vision realized to their satisfaction (but with a judicious amount of reality checks in the edits). I would love to see your comments during our editing stages, but that is all in-house until we publish. Unless you wish to be an editor...
Wicht |
One last bump for me and then I'll let this sink down to the bottom of the forum, like silt sinking in the sea, provided of course someone else doesn't respond to it. :)
And let me reiterate that we are indeed hoping to find some new, fresh writers to join our number (full disclosure: we will likely accept old, stodgy writers too) The more, the merrier.
Wicht |
Though I am still waiting for feedback on my own work, I thought I would mention Montalve has a new story up at Pathfinder Chronicler too.
Charles Evans 25 |
Though I am still waiting for feedback on my own work, I thought I would mention Montalve has a new story up at Pathfinder Chronicler too.
You should (if the email address you gave above still works) have email. (If not, I sent it to Zuxius too.)
I'm a bit busy at present, but I gave it a quick look over, pointed out a few specifics, and made some general comments.Apologies if you find the general feedback a bit brutal, but that's how she comes over to me, and at best it reduces the story to something I might borrow from a library rather than buy off a shop shelf. :(
Wicht |
Charles, I did get the email - thanks for the thoughts.
You're the second person to point out to me that "daughter of heaven" seems strange for a golarion demon-queen, but the term is canon. Its in her AP writeup.
I'll take your other criticisms to heart. It's tough to write about the braggings of a proper villain - but that's really what the story is (same as the first). I purposefully don't want her to be an anti-hero; there should be nothing heroic about her; but at the same time I want the story to be entertaining enough.
And if I get the time I'll check on those grammatical errors you pointed out.
Charles Evans 25 |
The trouble with bragging villains is that it usually makes very hard listening or reading for the audience... :-?
That was unfortunate as some parts - such as your take on magical item creation which was running through the latter part of the story - were interesting for me to read. I was slightly confused by what happened to the gold goblet until I figured out what was actually going on and that it was effectively materials & supplies (or rather offerings?) consumed by the process.
Montalve |
Though I am still waiting for feedback on my own work, I thought I would mention Montalve has a new story up at Pathfinder Chronicler too.
Thanks for pointing it out! was about to mention it.
The trouble with bragging villains is that it usually makes very hard listening or reading for the audience... :-?
That was unfortunate as some parts - such as your take on magical item creation which was running through the latter part of the story - were interesting for me to read. I was slightly confused by what happened to the gold goblet until I figured out what was actually going on and that it was effectively materials & supplies (or rather offerings?) consumed by the process.
That particular point was interesting... for a moment I myself asked what was happening or why... or if maybe some other kind of offer would have been better, but all in all the process its quite inteersting and evocative.