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#45 word cull countdown


Scenario Submission Talk

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

Twenty-six to go! Almost there.

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

...17...

Paizo Employee ** Developer

Dementrius wrote:
...17...

Remove instances of "will" (no future tense), "that" (as in "he knows that such and such"), and prepositional phrases, replacing them instead with more active and descriptive verbs.

Good luck!

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

2 words to spare! Now off to remove gobbledegook.

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

yoda8myhead wrote:
Dementrius wrote:
...17...

Remove instances of "will" (no future tense), "that" (as in "he knows that such and such"), and prepositional phrases, replacing them instead with more active and descriptive verbs.

Good luck!

Thanks for the tips! One "will" and two "that"'s removed. My submission is a passive-free zone.

Dark Archive

Pathfinder Adventure Path Subscriber
Dementrius wrote:
yoda8myhead wrote:
Dementrius wrote:
...17...

Remove instances of "will" (no future tense), "that" (as in "he knows that such and such"), and prepositional phrases, replacing them instead with more active and descriptive verbs.

Good luck!

Thanks for the tips! One "will" and two "that"'s removed. My submission is a passive-free zone.

Just spent the last weekend working with my wife's Master's Thesis and I can not tell you how often I scribbled red ink over the use of "will" and "that"(at least 6 times per page). Because of this, she is not very happy with me at the moment. My intentions were good but this has led me to rethink the way I edit her work.

As I see it, I have 3 options in my current situation...

Logically speaking,(I can be right) OR (I can be happy) OR (I can be wrong and unhappy.) Tough choice but I am not going with option 3.

Good luck to all on the open call!

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

Submitted. Good luck to everyone!

Paizo Employee ** Developer

I'm not submitting this time cause I'm busy with other things ;-) but best of luck to everyone submitting today and tomorrow. Just know that if you get selected, you'll look back on a mere 750 words with fond nostalgia.

** RPG Superstar 2012

A couple of finishing touches, and mine will be Josh's hands tonight.

Good luck to everyone!

** RPG Superstar 2012

Submitted! I guess Josh has an auto-reply thing going on, because I got my "received" e-mail three minutes after I sent my submission. :)

Good luck, everyone!

Sovereign Court *

If I hadn't spent a ridiculous amount of time coming up with a title I was satisfied with, I might have had more than four minutes to spare in submitting my proposal! Oh well, at least I had seven words to spare :).

Liberty's Edge RPG Superstar 2010 Top 16 , Star Voter 2013, Star Voter 2014

Elora wrote:
If I hadn't spent a ridiculous amount of time coming up with a title I was satisfied with, I might have had more than four minutes to spare in submitting my proposal! Oh well, at least I had seven words to spare :).

"Josh, do you accept large cash bribes?". There, nicely rounded up to 750 words for you.

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