You can use Golarion specific content in RPG Superstar entries, correct?
You sure can, even in round 1, but make sure you get it right - the voters will loudly point inconsistencies out, so be very careful that what you use is up to date and correct.
Things to avoid though are third party references, they are usually specifically excluded in each rounds rules, but on the off chance, it's best to avoid them unless a round specifically mentions a product.
Jeff Lee wrote:
"Talk" also includes posting elsewhere on open discussion sites, links, forums, etc. Treat your entry as the top secret of top secret, so secret even the government won't know.
filigreed cell phone of camping safely and trap springing
Didn't you mean... filigreed gold coin powered cell phone / swiss army tool combo of camping safely and trap springing favored by lady campers from the Tetons about 1700 years ago used exclusively to create wavy radiant hair styles?
Northern Michigan here. *Am I doing this right?*
Definitely - there is no way you count as American... you are more, ummm, "Canadian Pirate descended" looking at the size of that lake separating you. :P
Good luck to all you students in the Lydia Olson Library, studying hard for your final exams between Dec 9th and 14th. *cracks whip*
The write up says "...potentially capable of animating the dead..."
So allow me to respond with...
"Just this once! Everybody Lives!"
Preview - taking up the challenge, and breaking just about every single archetype rule of Sean's, here is a preview of how such a cat lady could go... I still have to work in purr, pounce, stalk, leg rub, yowl for dairy and similar skills and abilities, but here is the skeleton to be getting on with...
Crazy Cat Lady (Oracle)
Great golden eyes turn and follow you as you pass, green eyes observe your passage from the roof tops, dark feline shadows stalk your steps. A village with so many cats can mean just one thing, a Crazy Cat Lady is nearby. You wouldn't call her this to her face though, unless you want to spend the rest of your life as one of her thralls.
...abilities to do...
...revelations to do...
Final Revelation: Upon reaching 20th level, you become an avatar of all things feline, your race changes to rakshasa. ...possibly add changes here but might be repeating known rules...
Dropping out of the bottom of the recent round of review feedback is this little something.
I haven't edited it a great deal apart from a better multi-hued dragon tie in.
Fingers crossed I'm keeping the best two items for choosing from on submission day >.<
Imperial Coil Pebble
This smooth, flat anthracite pebble bears an exquisite gold leaf motif of an imperial sky dragon spiraling its surface.
Throwing the pebble horizontally or vertically, in the manner of a skipping stone, creates rainbow arcs of light as it skips. each rainbow solidifying into a multi-hued coil of an imperial sky dragons snake like torso. The coils, constantly undulating in the direction of the throw, form a sinuous bridge or spiral stairway lasting for six rounds, connecting the point of throw to another solid surface within a 100 foot range.
Stepping onto the coils and standing still results in the creature being moved by the undulations of the coils, bobbing up and down as they are propelled along at speed 20 feet. Actively moving with the coils, increases their speed by 20, moving against the coils reduces it by the same.
At least I didn't suggest gnomes ! :P
All that being said, I hope you didn't take my critique as not liking your item, because I really like the visual you have.
Not at all, I actually prize good honest feedback, it's the only way I can improve :)
Thanks and the same to everyone in Blazing 9 - a fantastic run of fun between competitions as always.
Just 21 days to Christmas now... and all those new Pathfinder books! ;)
Never seen frozen, so I wouldnt know about that :(
Hmmm, better stay away from all icy stuff for a while, it was the tracking aspect that made me reject it in the end, for the very reason you said :)
I have three items at the moment, so maybe one more to come to this thread.
Taking Clark's advice, here is my first draft of an item that started with the cool visual effect - cool being quite literal for this one...
Grass instantly freezes, crunching beneath the tread of these white dragon hide thigh high boots.
These constantly steaming boots alter the wearer's movement into an ice dancer’s glide for six rounds, increasing their speed by 20 feet, and leaving in their wake a trail of permafrost sheet ice lasting for four rounds. Treat this icy trail as difficult terrain for all but the wearer. The permafrost trail has sufficient strength to bear the weight of the wearer when used to cross streams, rivers and small lakes.
Enclosing an area by causing the trail to cross itself forces the area to fill with an icy sheen, the same thickness, properties and effects as the trail surrounding it. All creatures but the wearer must make a DC 16 Reflex save or fall prone.
Creatures susceptible to cold are slowed (as slow) when they start their turn standing on the permafrost ice left by the boots.
Superstar year 1 old school word limit friendly too! :D
Welcome Pamela - and everyone else.
A few links to get you started and save you some searching
A pdf I am building pulling together thread links, product links and sorting the last six years of discussion and information into a more readily accessible format.
This now includes some words on pricing and the mystic art that it is; how to use the entry form properly when entering and a reasonably complete and up to date breakdown of the round 1 template - assuming it doesn't change this year. It also provides links to all the prior winners, their entries for each round. It is an ongoing notebook, hope it helps.
NB Appendices: last results will likely need the links re-checking once this years competition starts, but the on page text is correct.
Ziv Wities wrote:
(Well, another way would be to submit a cellphone made of filigree.)
I'm thinking of going mad this year - my filigree has filigree with some embossing on top!
I like your phone though, was it made by that crazy goblin duo...
wait for it...:
Sam Sung And Roid?
This is whacky, crazy and couldn't possibly work idea. You have been warned.
How about a multi view point AP highlighting a war between Demons And Devils ending with confronting the manipulators behind them, all set in the obvious planes. Political intrigue, maneuvering and plots abound, some the players create, some they get mixed up in for good or ill.
First, What do I mean by multi view point AP
Well, it's an AP where you get to play the front half as Devils (or the Back half as Demon) meeting in the middle providing the opportunity for groups to meet up in games clubs and represent on the battlefields.
It could go something like this...
AP 1 Born a Devil, Conjured a Demon:
The players initially play their parents/creators as they are born to existence, giving a taste of powers they can aspire too. It reveals the early formative years of demons and devils, nurturing their animosity that feeds the on going war.
AP 2 Teen Devil, Teen Demon:
How bad do things go when you are a Devil with all the rampant drives of teen hood? What happens when the Demon discovers the pretty Devil out of his league and race?
AP 3 Summoned and Shackled:
Devils and demons getting summoned by different groups and sent on missions, many of which make them meet with differing mission agendas.
AP 4 Follow Me Follow Now:
Now we start acquiring worshipers and truly come into our power. Boy, the prince of devils throne looks very comfortable, pity its occupied - for now... Well Demon Horde, are you going to let the devil grow so strong.
AP 5 Battleground Mine:
Mass skirmishes as you try to carve your land from fellow competing demons and devils. Then you become part of an unholy council... and move up the echelons of power through intrigue, manipulation and down right nastiness and murder.
AP 6 Final Engagement:
So you plan and strategize, open the portal and march on the Paizo offices... Who is the biggest devil there and who the greatest demon? And can you wrest their position from them. Watch out for the insidious and evil ninja store care bears - they are the worst being both devil and demon combined.
Heh heh, how far did you get before you realized this was an in fun post ;)
Hmmm, so there is to be an update...
In which case, I won't read anything further just yet, including current forum posts or the copy I just downloaded. I will bring a fresh eye to the revised version instead, make my notes and then joining the fun.
This should be an intriguing design learning task I've now set myself.
Yeah, who uses gibbering mouthers often enough to make miniature of them?!
Still catching up , but had to answer this one cos I am sad...
Aberations Set of DnD Miniatures, #50 is the one you want...
I like this Curaigh, nice visuals on this one - but I'm a sucker for wolves, spirit wolves, etc.
*looks over to his indoor wolf on mountain water fountain and smiles*
First sentence, I think it should be line not lines?
Other than that, I think Jacob has covered everything else nicely.
I think "tikka" meals in an Indian restaurant are often the ones baked in stoneware containers and have the bright orangey-red look. They tend to be very mild to no spice heat at all.
All together now my fellow Pertwee fans...
"You put a Wor after W,
So in Worzel language...
Kostchtchie. (I used to pronounce this Kost-Kot-Chee)
Small request for my editor...
If you are the person working through Pairi-Daêza’s Abode, please let me know of any edits you make as I would like to learn from even the smallest of changes so that I can continue to improve my writing style and submission quality - I suspect it's not perfect but haven't heard anything yet so I am curious.
Even a small PM on this site will be sufficient. Many Thanks in advance and I hope I'm not taxing you too much :D
Looks like that might be "Clark Angry Face" perhaps? Or... maybe he is giving a subtle hint to some sort of "Mythic Dragons" Legendary product he is thinking of doing :D
Seconding Clark's post in the other thread, I have now reviewed everyone's posts in this thread AND some of your work in private as part of various review circles.
So I'm going to turn the thumb screws here too :P
I fully expect to see at least 2 of you in Top 32 this year. No names - that would be too much pressure :P
ALL of you. Yup, all of you are plenty ready.
Blazing 9 is going to rule the competition this year!
Don't let me down now!
Jacob W. Michaels wrote:
... other than not really knowing what the genie seals are still
It's worth pulling this comment out generally. With round 1 now being a public vote, it is something that must be considered even more.
Although working in underused / new design space shows a good mind set as a designer, it does tend to limit your voting public and thus potentially your votes. This is the big gamble we designers must consider when creating our entry - I personally am still torn whether to have a mythic element or not.
If I do, my entry will be around 260 words, if I don't, then it will be nearer 200. If I do include it, I am gambling that mythic is wide enough or out long enough that the public wont hold it against me.
It is a big decision that I have to make, and one that probably is going to made right at the wire when I press that submit button.
I can't and shouldn't advise on which areas/new design space are dangerous, too niche or not - we all have our own tastes and system knowledge. All I can say is you must consider carefully your item's general appeal - ask yourself "am I too niche?", be brutally honest with yourself too. And above all, gather a good review circle, people who would be willing to say things like the quote above.
I would run through the winning items and the public voting commentary from last years threads - it will most likely give you a big insight on how your "last years idea" may have fared.
I would also write a couple of items or three this week to get back into the swing, you might even create an item better than your idea from last year. Blazing 9 thread is still going, so grab it while you can.
But do that first suggestion first, right now, sit down, mug in one hand, tablet /laptop in the other and get to it. I think it will be a massive help now we are public vote dependent on every round right from the beginning.
That's cool, it is the ordering of feats and ordering of spells in the construction that is so often gotten wrong, so it was a good test.
You did extremely well, I listed those extra few items for the benefit of any thread followers.
Anyone in the UK - Doctor Who 50th, An Adventure in Time and Space documentary is on BBC 2 tonight (Thursday 21st) - it looks amazing, don't miss it now.
2 days to the in cinema 3D, 50th special, and I am a lucky golden ticket holder :D
Yes, I am that sad :P
Well done, you got about most of them.
Check the name - should not be italic bold, just bold. Next a couple of really sneaky items, one template and one pricing...
You missed the comma between the spells was italicised ;)
Next thing, you caught the not half price but did not catch the price exceeds the end of the wondrous item tables :) but you did spot it was artefact pricing
Anyone else want to add anything more? I can ;P
Wonderbra is a known make of real world item...
Construction includes the components, i.e the physical item - gold bar, it should not do this.
Ok, spells were not sorted alphabetically.
Wondrous not wonderous
Feat is Mythic Crafter, and no doodad, and using the correct feat name, it should be reordered.
Finally, there are some missing spaces in the template - points to Weight and Requirements. And the cost uses gps instead of gp.
Oh wow, just found out who is mapping out my side trek location - looking at their public shared work and their prior work in Wayfinder, I think you are in for a real treat!
Can't believe I was so lucky to get that artist for my map :)
That's a man who truly understands who really wears the trousers and would like to borrow them at weekends.
Writing isn't easy, don't give up!
I know feedback sometimes hurts, you pour your heart and soul into things, but having had the Wayfinder editing experience, having had to get up 6 years running from trying to get design to a superstar level, I can tell you that you learn to be pragmatic and accept feedback.
I am the guy (if you search the past years, you can find it) who had judges feedback of, e.g. "I can't take anymore of this, it's given me a headache." - believe me, I know what hard feedback is. You rise above it though and who knows what can happen.
Learn from it, it makes you a better designer in the long run.
I have come to accept that I may not be a star designer, but looking back on my designs over those six years, I like to think that I have improved to a level that could one day be employable as a free lancer.
I doubt I will ever get a top 32 slot (just like Clark admits he couldn't win this contest), but that doesn't stop me trying, experiencing the journey and hopefully growing in skills and understanding of the games design processes.
Let's look at your post. 6 items, all in a similar game area. That is impressive to begin with. You had the courage to ask for feedback - even more impressive.
This shows me that not only are you full of ideas but that you want to learn, you want to design to the best you can, you want to improve and be successful. So don't give in, pick your breeches up.
Here's a challenge for you.
Pick one of those items, your favorite of the ones you have posted. Give it some polish and some visuals, give us some cinematics in a revised version.
Don't worry about word limit this time, or formatting (yes that's me saying that) - just work on your description, go crazy wild with your imagination and wow us. Then we can look at how you can do that with fewer words, costing, templating and so forth, but first, give us that golden nugget, the kernel of the item and the wow factor.
Cool, it was the construction of the second item I was referring to - the (ISM).
I'll study them more in depth later - I'm about to introduce a new group of players to the wonder that is the Revised Special monster that is Rise of the Runelords, Anniversary Edition *evil grin*.
I think being old and santa like means that the games club send all the new intake my way - the fools :P
I've not come across a slot called "genie seal" before - I wonder if that is targeting an object, if it should be "none", the standard slot for object targeting items.
Do you have a reference to another Paizo product that uses this slot or better yet, a PRD link?
I can work out the table fine. As I'm about to go to the games club, I will review more fully when I get home. Some quick points though
a) good template use.
That's a starter for you.
Oh my lord - you are an evil man. Funny, but evil. >.<
I think Curaigh has nailed it.
They wont ask us to do something which isn't generally available as to do so makes the voters job so much more difficult.
Basically - They would need to give the designers access to the current ACG so we can follow their lead and they would need to give it to the masses so they can determine how well they have done in order to vote in an informed manner.
Also, there would be the danger that the public would view such a round as indicative of the way the ACG will finally work, perhaps a perception they don't want set in stone in the public mind just yet.
So I also don't think it will be an ACG round as there is too little public information for voters or contestants at present.
I think it will be archetypes again. The first time archetypes was tried, the judges had a nightmare round, the second time (last year), the archetypes were more solid (we all had the prior years examples of what not to do to learn from).
I think what they might do though is go back further and have a villain / major NPC type of round, maybe with a mythic twist. That or have another archetype round as that provides a good ratio mixture of fluff and crunch.
Also very useful feedback. Sometimes my pricing goes fubar.
On reflection, even though it is two 1st level spells, I think it should be price bumped to the 3-4k range of the wondrous item table.
The item I have kept is much, much tighter themed, promise. :D
Agreed, I lost my comma during cut and paste somehow, there should have been a comma before the word "ceiling" so that the two commas act like your em-dash example.
Fair enough. It used to negate, but suppress was better for low level in my mind after reflecting on it. I was thinking of having the lantern move with the user, so suppress would have allowed darkness to reassert with the lit area moving away.
I saw them acting like a sparkler on bonfire night, so I didn't give them any light radius, but you can easily see them out to 100 feet marking the enemies position fairly well. Same as seeing camp fires from a distance.
Ah, an artefact of an earlier draft where it actually turned into a miniature moon once it had reached its max height. Oopsie. I would likely have fixed as you described on final reviews.
It is cool and cinematic...but I feel like the voting public may not have liked it as much.
Hence my pain and anguish taking three days to decide.
Fantastic feedback though, I'm feeling much happier now you have said this. Maybe, just maybe, I am on the right lines this year.
OK, as this will be the last item in Blazing 9 for me this year, let's try that Beetlejuice trick again... ;)
Neil, Neil, Neil,
What wise words would you share with us on my lantern please guys?
Yeah - Clark as well - it's been a while since we have seen a Clark review so let's see if he's willing too :D - and as an added challenge, Clark cannot use the phrase "what Neil said" (or variants thereof) :P
As I catch up on all the discussions, a lot of referrals to archetypes are being made - so, here is a list of archetypes linking to the PRD pages they are on - so now when you refer to existing archetypes, you can find them to review them a bit quicker (it's complete to February 2013 - I must get around to checking new products and updating it at some time.)
Wow, this thread is taking some reading :)
Interestingly - there is a Swashbuckler already in the PRD - an archetype of Rogue (scroll down this page to find it).
Be interesting to see how things will be indicated in modules etc if there is an existing archetype of the same name (I'm guessing it might be a case of "when you see Swashbuckler, from now on, refer the new class and not the archetype").
It's getting closer. I have started winnowing down my Work In Progress folder in preparation. That means about 2-3 weeks left I suspect.
For some reason, I am really, really stoked for this years contest.
Ok, enough dithering!
Here is the item I am not using.
Based on Chinese Sky Lanterns… 264 words.
A lit lantern rises 30 feet ceilings permitting, brightening to a full moon glow illuminating a 30 foot radius area with full moonlight. This illumination affects creatures susceptible to the light of a full moon, and suppresses all forms of darkness within its area of effect.
It takes one round to rise during which all creatures in the lit area are outlined by a nimbus of moonlight as faerie fire. Two tiny imperial dragons writhe free from the lantern shade, each formed of light, leaping down to entwine one or two targets chosen by the user.
The dragons undulate sinuously around their target using their brightness to distract and harry. This imposes a cumulative -1 penalty to AC and attack rolls per dragon encircling a target. If the target was invisible when chosen it remains so, however an entwining dragon negates the benefits of invisibility as faerie fire.
The dragons move with the target(s) to a range of 100 feet, beyond which they return to the lantern, circling it and awaiting a new target to be chosen. Changing a dragons target is a swift action.
An active lantern has hp 30; hardness 10; AC 16. After d4+3 rounds, or when the lantern is destroyed, the dragons and lantern shatter into a miniature starfield, diminish and fade away.