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"waking dream" was just description that I couldn't think of a better way to describe the effect - it's not really a day dream as that would make you unaware of your surroundings, and I didn't want to use the name of existing spells as it wasn't really a spell either.
As for "may", that way is passive writing - after 8 years (and 9 seasons) of being hammered to not write items using "may, should, could, would, might, can, ..." and variants there of, I don't think I am going back to those old ways.
Writing an item description requires a non passive style resulting in a more vibrant and active energy in the description - it's all about saying "what happens" and "how it happens" and not "what might happen" or "how it might happen". Gosh, I sound more like SKR every year! O-o :P
If I rewrite that older version I posted here, I would probably rewrite "the wielder activates" into a more dymaic form of "Activating a star..." and lose the wielder bit.