karkon |
Looks interesting.
Some thoughts:
1) There are a bunch of ratings that are two colors. I get what you were doing but I suggest sticking with one color and a parenthetical (Green for some games). That makes it seem less like an accident and more clearly communicates your thoughts.
2) For highly rated attributes I suggest putting in the mechanical benefit so that it can be evaluated without needing to look it up. The better guides put in in all the entries but that is a lot of work. I think the minimum amount is just the greens and blues.
3) You did not have a lot of blue stuff. Now that may be because dwarves are essentially a good but not great race but I think that might warrant some examination.
Richard Leonhart |
karkon made very good points.
I would rate steel soul blue without a doubt.
You judge the classes quite extreme, a new player might get the impression he can't play a halfway decent wizard with a dwarf, however a dwarf void elementalist with steel soul will laugh at any spell/spelllike abilities, and will have spell for every mundane threat.
So for someones first guide it's really great to see, and a guide for a race is certainly something new, but the presentation could be improved (narrower and more pictures) and the colouring could be a little less pessimistic in my opinion (it's your guide of course, and you represent your opinion).
Under A Bleeding Sun |
Looks interesting.
Some thoughts:
1) There are a bunch of ratings that are two colors. I get what you were doing but I suggest sticking with one color and a parenthetical (Green for some games). That makes it seem less like an accident and more clearly communicates your thoughts.
Fixed
2) For highly rated attributes I suggest putting in the mechanical benefit so that it can be evaluated without needing to look it up. The better guides put in in all the entries but that is a lot of work. I think the minimum amount is just the greens and blues.
Added a little more details to blue and green options.
3) You did not have a lot of blue stuff. Now that may be because dwarves are essentially a good but not great race but I think that might warrant some examination.
I put a little bit on the reason why, dwarves have more traits than anyone. Gnomes have 8, which is one less and everyone else has six or less.
karkon made very good points.
I would rate steel soul blue without a doubt.
I felt most the dwarf builds are feat starved already, which is why I didn't, but I raised it anyways.
You judge the classes quite extreme, a new player might get the impression he can't play a halfway decent wizard with a dwarf, however a dwarf void elementalist with steel soul will laugh at any spell/spelllike abilities, and will have spell for every mundane threat.
I put a little detail blurb before the class section that I hope clarifies things some. Any race can play any class, and do well, I just feel full progression casters need the bumps more than anyone else.
So for someones first guide it's really great to see, and a guide for a race is certainly something new, but the presentation could be improved (narrower and more pictures) and the colouring could be a little less pessimistic in my opinion (it's your guide of course, and you represent your opinion).
I really don't mean it pessimistic, and now I'm sad it comes off like that. Maybe I'll go through and change any borderline to green. If you have any opinions on what should be bumped I'd like to hear them. Yea, I'll work on getting to pictures probably.
"Slow and Steady: Already stated earlier - this is excellent. " Where is it already stated?
Also most of us do not have color scheme memorized.
Sorry sir, I copied and pasted that below before I finalized things. My bad. I have corrected and put a little more detail in its entry.
Thanks everyone for the advice and feedback, I appreciate it.karkon |
I just read the edited version. Looks good. I felt your ideas were more clearly communicated.
In sections where you had: COLOR (DIFFERENT COLOR) I think you might just want to move the (different color) part to the part of the entry that discusses it. When I was reading Monk (Zen Archer) I initially thought the whole entry was for zen archer until I got to the zen archer part. Then I realized the first part was for the base monk.